Illuminate

burn like a candle, until there is nothing left.

Tonight I watch candles commit suicide.
They devour their own body
and wax drips down
until they are no more,

but oh how they express elegance
in their short and humble lives.
Their aroma, so beautiful.
I could only mention to you
the ravishing smell
of vanilla
and spice;

No, but you
would understand the candles
self indulgence
if you were still here.

Flames would sparkle against the wall.
A silhouette of lovers would dance amongst
the ceiling tiles.

Spiders would rejoice
and watch
as passion fills the room once more.
They are sick of counting dust flakes
and watching this girl live her life
each day without a single moment
taking place.

Somewhere in this world
you could also watch candles burn,
but only I can show you
the desire expressed within the flame.
We both lay alone tonight
as bits of wax frozen within ourselves.
We cannot simply ask for
a burning love.
It takes self sacrifice
to illuminate.

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

this is so wonderfully described....loved it...a nice message.thanks.

[MandaBear]

I agree with everything Follow the Phoenix said! Truly lovely!!

[John Fitzgerald]

brillliant. subtlely contained. love the idea, and executed well.

just one grammatical point, should it not read They devour their own bodies in the second line?

well done again my friend :)

[The White Wolf]

I think this is spectacular, truly. I love the opening stanza..the first line is especially good. The comparison you draw between candles and life and love...so well done. Well penned, my friend.

[Distant horizons]

Wonderfully penned, as always. Such a beautiful comparison. Dancing flames/writhing lovers. Great flow to this too.

[Coyote Poetry]

'No, but you
would understand the candles
self indulgence
if you were still here."
You are a amazing writer. The words took me in and the story in the poem make me wander into good vision and thoughts. I had to read a few times for the pleasure of your thoughts. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote