The Grave In Me

The demands of the dead.

Where a restless corpse carries on,

there’s an open grave inside me.

With a mouth full of worms,

it’s begging to be buried.

 

As it bumps against my innards,

whoever it is, is hurt.

With eyes like black beetles,

it’s demanding more and more dirt.

 

A vagrant shivering in the plot,

or killing time clawing and chewing.

Pounding left, right, dread and doom;

uneasy and full of suffering.

 

It keeps pleading for more Z’s.

But a heart at peace doesn’t beat.

The tomb simply cannot be sealed…

it’s nearly human and nearly me.

Reviews

[Aimee Mahathy]

Wow, this is really great. I loved the repetition and the half rhymes like "chewing" and "suffering", I don't know what it is about nearly perfect rhymes, but they're like way better than perfect ones. I think they add depth to a poem.
With the picture I imagined this something like some ancient Egyptian curse, as a metaphor or something.
Really great!

[Poetic Beauty]

the details jump off the page and into my mind. this is dark but as a story to tell. The flow is easy to follow.

[Dilan Gray]

I like this poem, I love the images. They are really great!

[E.H. Monroe]

The visual of the vagrant shivering and the personification of the insects keep th erader thinking. Is it purely the bugs who want sleep? Is there truly some drifter taking up space in the save grave, or is this just a cry to be left the f**k alone. Peace, nah, peace when dead he says and who the f**k wants that?

Nice work

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

Fantastic!! I loved this poem the darkness you emit is truly inspirational I loved the flow of this piece and the darkness appeals to me so much i'm going to have to view your other work well done

[MuSe Ampoule]

Lovely dark piece that reminds me of an old Living Dead zombie flick. Great work!

[Siddhartha]

Holy mother of WTF!!! A lush dark poem this is...Delves deep into the human condition(pun intended)...You have an eye for the raw and the visceral...Wonderful work...Love it...

[?]

Dark and deep poem
(lil gross too) lol
just kidding,
Great poem, love the ending as well

[Linear]

Empty shells are we, walking dead we see, look in the mirror and pray that reflection isn't me. Great work with a brilliant ending.

[donella75]

I see you have a keen eye for hitting the reader with a killer ending.