My poem is Geometry

just a bit of fun :) captcha for this one is "fumbler" ... ;}

My Poem is Geometry

surgical lines draw

coordinating parallels on

metaphorical axis 

protracting angles

mesmerize my complex balance

of X and Y

internal compilations combust in

black and white my

pointed mind abstactions

obsolete

verbal gyrations this

body of evidence

twist and turn

 

my poem is geometry

and very hard to learn

12/17/2018

E.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I loved geometry becuz defining space and objects is tangible, but algebra felt so damn meaningless with x's and y's & no concrete answers! I love your creativity in picking such a relatable idea to write a poem about! I love the way your mathematical terms could apply to many possibilities thru-out life, far from the buttons of any calculator! *smile* Hope your holiday season is sizzling with joy & good eats! I also hope this is a sign you're posting new writing more lately . . . my attendance has been sketchy, but I haven't seen you posting too much for a bit & we miss you! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Margie ... you know i luv ya!

[Lilly]

I like the vocabulary and flow of this piece.
Having so many multi-syllabic words in close succession (particularly in the first few sections) make this fun to read aloud in my opinion!
I also like the feel / flow of the final two lines.
A fun, creative poem.

[Einstein Noodle]

spot on Lilly! fun was my intent in writing it ..i also was trying to use more powerful action words beginning the lines ... its gratifying that you felt the benefit of reading out loud ... thanks again my new friend!
E.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Not into math but poetry makes much
more interesting I imagine it could be turned
into something romantic and sexy and play
around with the words and numbers.

It's my mood and where
my imagination is lately
But this wasn't boring at
all.

Nicely penned my
friend this has
a very sexy charm
to it👍❤😊

[Einstein Noodle]

i'm so happy you read the sexiness of it Benita! thank you so much for reviewing

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're very welcome ☺ my friend 😁👍 I truly enjoyed reading it.

[Paul Bell]

Trying to see what angle you're coming from here.
If I start in pub X, move onto pub Y, will I be pie eyed squared, or just GE-O-ME-T-RY.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahahaha thanks for reviewing Paul ..and try is all, at least me own Da, ever asked ;) love and peace on ya!
E.

[NotUsinganymore]

Extrememly creative! I enjoyed it a lot! c: I personally am bad at math and even basic math haha

[Einstein Noodle]

glad you enjoyed reading JungLee! my own efforts with high school math were embarrassing as well as the grades i received for my lack of effort ... ;{ but life does move on with or without equal equations :)
E.

[andrew mitchell]

Indeed it’s all about the lines! How they join with other lines! Not forgetting counting those syllables!
Yes word power relies on maths not forgetting the structure. I see the curves in your writing.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha love it Andrew! we are all just bends in the light ...glad you reviewed this one sir!
read moreahahahaha love it Andrew! we are all just bends in the light ...glad you reviewed this one sir!
E.

[sette]

i never learn to love math and geometry of all math subjects.. one my geometry teacher was a loser and second i can't understand the theorems and all so upon reading your poem... all i can say my friend is that it rocks!!! merry christmas and a happy new year to you and stay in good health always

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha i am with you on all accounts sette! glad you enjoyed the poem in spite of "school" ... i wasn't very compatible with any of the high school math classes ... but grew to appreciate its voices as i .......er............. aged ;}
thanks for reviewing sette ... all the best to ya!
E.

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Wonderfully penned Einstein Noodle, but you forgot the three dimensional "Z" axis. LOL!

Thought provoking poem. Great job. :-)

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha ...so i did Tamara! but I never was very good at math and its progeny ;) sure do appreciate your time to read and comment ..i guess i better hits the books again in search of "Z" :)))
E.

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Nah! Don't bother. The Z axis is only necessary with Calculus and Differential Equations. If you are taking neither, don't worry about it. :-)

[Einstein Noodle]

:)...................... you make me belly chuckle ma'am! peace and love to ya!

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Happy New Year to you. :-)

[Coffee Lady]

Unique concept! I like how you relate geometry to poetry and to the struggles of life itself. I wonder if this could have been longer because the concept was so complex? Great read!

[Einstein Noodle]

yes...easy to go on and on i suppose ;) add/subtract math ..algebra, geometry, trig, physics, metaphysics .... whew! i'm ready for my nap just thinking about it all ;} thanks for the visit Ms.Coffee ... i appreciate your thoughts on this and am keeping them in the back of me noodle ... i have read that the brilliance in poetry lay in the revisions ;))) happy un-birthday .. and a very Merry Christmas to you and yours :) love and peace!
E.
ps you got me thinking ma'am! maybe "Chemistry is Equality" .... what do you think?

[Coffee Lady]

Haha! Happy unbirthday and Merry Christmass to you as well ...I love Chemistry is Equlity! :)

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ......................

[lightsong]

OK! mine would be a complex chemical equation that is hard to solve lol though it's funny but brilliantly done, the ending says it all, my originality is "mine", my style is "mine" dare You imitate it, and I dare You to win!

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha yes Chemistry ... another one of my incompatible subjects in high school ;} but we do change eh!? love your impressions with the closing ... wasn't a conscious thought but i can see how you take it ...so nice to have met you and get to know you Light ...right here at the Cafe' ..God bless always
E.

[lightsong]

Oh yes we do change, as everything changes too :)

so nice to meet You too, know and be friends with You dear E!

[Patricia Wedel]

dear E... interesting that I loved Geometry in high school and managed to use a contractor as I tend to be artistic. However I never could get the drift of Algebra ... Margie and I have that in common and other things also. fondly, Pat

[Einstein Noodle]

i think that algebra by far is the more confusing for sure ;} thanks for reviewing my bit of math fun ... peace on earth Pat!
E.