I'll never give up

Even if my head starts bleeding,
Even if something comes across my leading.
I'll never give up.

Even when my eyes are shutting down,
Or if my head is without my crown.
I'll never give up.

Even if i lose the things around,

Or there's no one to save my background.

I'll never give up.

Until when i breathe my last,
I know hope dies but destiny doesn't.
I'll never give up.

Reviews

[LKBillips]

Good rhythm. Some of the phrases were odd, but the force behind it was felt.

[Donicca Dona L]

and you should never give up no matter what.
ahh you know how touch with your poetry .

[Barbara Walker]

I'm not sure what the line, "Even if something comes across my leading" means. or no one to save my background, but I get your intent.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thankyou Barbara

[Gwenn the little girl]

Such a simple group of words bundled together can value so much, and your poem justifies this statement!

" I know hope dies, but destiny doesn't"

I like this so much! It shows that even if everything is filled with desolation and agony, we will and always arrive at the place where we are meant to be, regardless if we are hopeless or hopeful!

Thank you for sharing this piece, I am sure others, including myself, are encouraged as well!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thankyou so much gwenn

[Karisha Nove]

Inspiring words... arrow through my heart...
i love this line- "or if my head is without my crown. ill never give up".
you're the best.... i love this poem...

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank-you so much Karisha

[Jiya]

amazing! it is hard to come across such sophisticated poems.
" i know hope dies but destiny doesn't"
I have become a fan of your poetry.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thankyou so much Namya☺ kind words

[Emily L]

Very nice poem. The rhyming wasn't forced, everything flowed well, and the overall message was a very positive one. I think one of the last lines is the best though, "I know hope dies but destiny doesn't" that lines really sticks with you and makes you think...I know it did for me. This was a great read, awesome work!

[mou]

very inspiring and specially second last line, it's awesome..it's really tough to hold on oneself during these days..yet like all your other writing, it is full of hope and wisdom..a positive candle that can adjust itself at anywhere..very nice piece

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thankyou mou☺ kind words

[Zoya]

"I know hope dies but destiny doesn't."-love this line. The ones who start their journey with the firm thought of never giving up in their minds, are the ones who rule this world. Keep inspiring!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thankyou zoe..and i will

[Zoya]

most welcome

[jacob erin-cilberto]

many things to like here, especially the repetition of the idea that fate happens but if we live each day the best we can and don't stop till the end...we have given it our best shot...and can pass more comfortably knowing that.

[Farhan Shaikh]

You're right😉 thankyou so much for your review..