` One Day in August`

lying outside in the August sun
feeling its fiery warmth
 crying alone

          the ferns on the patio
             seem to weep with me
                yet the roses are smiling

 it doesn't help

only loneliness bursts within
everything is different since
you drifted out of my life

            i polish my nails

                 dab a bit of lipstick
                     sip some iced- lemonade

everything is fine for awhile

then you magnetize my mind
as if it were not my own
drawing my thoughts to you

 
               the gentle caress
                     a goodnight kiss
                               all missed

 suppose this woman was made to cry

 
sentimental tears which say i miss you
wishing you were near 
just to whisper how much

 

                    I still love you
                         want you
                              need you

if only for this one day in August

 

Reviews

[Jibey]

The trailing form of this poem is like a trickling brook that meanders along, touching the banks but never able to regain its source (if this rambling comment makes any sense). We long for lost relationships, for lost opportunities... but only the future remains. I catch the poignancy and pain of this and feel a deep sense of wanting to comfort... Good to keep spilling it, maybe.., and to go with the flow.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Jibey..ever so much for the lovely insightful reviews..I so appreciate;

[Patrick Ramsey]

I loved this poem. The structure, timing, the three staggered lines that made me feel like I was walking down some steps. Then then the lone line that packed a punch after the others. I hope the writer finds coolness, if nothing else, in her drink. Keep writing!

[Fran Marie]

So glad you enjoyed reading.. thanks for reviewing my poems.. much appreciTed.. and yes tge writer has found cooling relief.. lol

[MOON]

Poignant nostalgic write for a special love. Lovely write.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks moon so vey much appriciat it

[....................]

this is such a sad but well-written piece...'magnetize my mind' - what a gorgeous line... it's just how it is; our mind, drawn to that drifted love... summer is not all sunshine and roses...great job, Fran

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks , FT, so much appriciated...

[Miss Sharon]

This is a powerfully poignant and mesmerizing write my friend. The sadness is palatable and so well written one feels personally immersed within its grasp. ~Sharon

[Fran Marie]

Thanks,Sharon, so very much..glad you enjoyed...

[Casondra Baerwolf]

This is a very good piece. It is really moving and I feel as if i can relate to it. You used really good imagery.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Casondra; for reading and the reviews on my poetry,

[Lauriegirl]

This totally refreshed me and my spirit..The imagery is nothing less than divine and perfect..I love every line

[Fran Marie]

awhh, so glad you enjoyed my poem.. thank so much, Laurie;

[Matching Socks]

This one is so special Fran, tugs at my heart. Missing someone special.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ana, so vey much..

[Tina Kline]

The missing of someone, how it hurts!
A very beautiful poem so full of the pain and longing for that special someone now gone.
Very well written.

[Fran Marie]

thanks Tina, so very much;

[Tina Kline]

You're very welcome.