Behind the Moon

drifting in a smoke filled cloud..
vague visions of you
distant and distorted..

a love song serenades me..
into a trance..
I'm in your dance

yet..

I cannot find the steps
to complete the love song.

Im simply sitting in dark shadows .

a woman behind the moon

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love the way your slightly jagged delivery mimics the darting mind that wanders thru memories & longing & regret while gazing at the night sky trying to chase sleep, but getting tangled instead (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Margie....ever so much appreciated

[Vin]

i'm in your dance, yet forgotten he steps- ther's much more to what we read.

LOVE!!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Vin so much for your words..I appreciate

[Coyote Poetry]

I do understand the poem dear Fran. Be close and so far. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

Thanks John..much appreciated..

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Fran.

[Jade]

This is so beautiful, I enjoyed this write

[Fran Marie]

Thank Jade..much appreciated..

[augustus]

Beautifully simple. I liked it.

[TheJordBaker]

A beautiful piece, I was pulled in by the title which is poetic itself and touched by the writing.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Jordon..ever so appreciate your kind review ..

[Paul Bell]

The longing for someone no longer there, like a Greek tragedy.
Every word just follows exquisitely into the next word.
Even the ending touches you.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Paul.. for reading I so appreciate your kind review on my poem..

[Bryad Polis Valentino]

Actually quite beautiful. I was skeptical. Thank you for sharing this sort of dance with words. I'll pray by the river that you will share more with me.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Bryad..ever so much for your review on my poetry...I. appreciate your words..
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[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like the whole poem...but from the third line of the second stanza to the end...damn...perfect...
finding the steps to complete the love song is not easy...sometimes they are so elusive.
j.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Jacob..ever so for the lovely review..glad you liked it..