Echoes~

Echoes~

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Dorsimbra form

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Echoes in the distance calling to me
vague voices,yet clearly lock 'pon my mind
visons of light from darkness emerge free
flowing through an infinite span of time


Controlling my soul a powerful force
surreal source,tis unknown,unseen,untamed.
angel or demon,which steers this cruel course
dreams pushing my soul in remorse repent


Perchance 'tis enlightment from up above
a love touching down to instill within
compassion,erasing sin as I hear
echoes in the distance calling to me

© 2019 Fran Marie


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Had to look up the form .. so thank you for that .. it fills the spot for me word of the day ;)) I am not real good at iambic pentameter but I don't think this quite fits that requirement .. you have three quatrains .. first abab ... second short lined free verse (best verse for me) maybe shorten Ls 3 &4 ... I like the theme a lot ... abstract spiritual pondering will never come back void eh!? as the eternal optimist .. i gravitate to your closing verse and that core principal of love covering a multitude of sin ... and the wistful "..calling to me" ... i hope we all can hear it when our time comes ... and even more importantly ... as we go about our daily tasks ... beautiful thoughts inspired .. i don't think it hits on the iambic requirement ... i really like the form .. it embraces rigid discipline and wild abandon ... well done!
E.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

1 Month Ago

LOL poor Richard... what we will do without Richard:)
  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

haha E and Robert..I did speak
with Richard about this form
and he said "the Dorsimbra.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

ahahaha i am not surprised .. he likes things "as they should be" ... not mish-mashed ... but that i.. read more



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echoes in the distance calling out my name

Posted 1 Month Ago


A wonderful poem shared dear Fran. Old age, bring many echoes to us. Reminders who we are and where we are going. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

thanks dear John.for your
kind thoughts and words
ever s o much appreciate;
Coyote Poetry

1 Month Ago

Always my pleasure and you are welcome Fran.
Not familiar with this form but I like the flow of it... the discourse has an old school resonance to it:) it is a double edge sword opening ones ears to the echoes on one hand you hear things on the other hand you hear things LOL hopefully most of yours come in the form of enlightenment!

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

hi Robert..thanks for reading
if I ever try writing this form
again I will need much m.. read more
dear Fran ... untamed Angel or demon is what we deal with in our lives, especially the political arena... it is the demon I dislike that disturbs the “party” and somehow an Angel comes along and soothes our Soul. You are Brave to put these powers into poetry. truly, Pat

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

thanks Pat..so very much for reading
I do appreciate;
Had to look up the form .. so thank you for that .. it fills the spot for me word of the day ;)) I am not real good at iambic pentameter but I don't think this quite fits that requirement .. you have three quatrains .. first abab ... second short lined free verse (best verse for me) maybe shorten Ls 3 &4 ... I like the theme a lot ... abstract spiritual pondering will never come back void eh!? as the eternal optimist .. i gravitate to your closing verse and that core principal of love covering a multitude of sin ... and the wistful "..calling to me" ... i hope we all can hear it when our time comes ... and even more importantly ... as we go about our daily tasks ... beautiful thoughts inspired .. i don't think it hits on the iambic requirement ... i really like the form .. it embraces rigid discipline and wild abandon ... well done!
E.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

1 Month Ago

LOL poor Richard... what we will do without Richard:)
  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

haha E and Robert..I did speak
with Richard about this form
and he said "the Dorsimbra.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

ahahaha i am not surprised .. he likes things "as they should be" ... not mish-mashed ... but that i.. read more
nicely done with the form...but i really like the second stanza...how some force unseen and untamed has hold of us most of the time...even with free will...there is something unrandom in our randomness...

j.

Posted 1 Month Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

yes; it certainly seems. that way
at times..thanks Jacob so
vey much;

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