Winds of November

Winds of November

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Ae Feislighe Form

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Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

© 2009 Fran Marie


Author's Note

  Fran Marie
Ae Freislighe

Each line of the Ae Freislighe has seven syllables, with lines
one and three ending in triple rhymes and two and four with
double rhymes. The poem must also end as it began, either with
the first syllable, word, phrase, or line.


The Ae Freislighe is a quatrain stanza with a fixed rhyme scheme

xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)
xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)

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well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those .. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o .. read more
  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend... read more



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the form is new to me, the poem itself is lovely.
November has never been my favourite, so cold and wet around here and signs of winter.

Posted 11 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

11 Months Ago

Thanks Ana so much appreciate your reading and review of my poetry
I love November from the dressed down trees to the leaves skirting through the wind.
You are a master of taking the reader with you.

Posted 11 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

11 Months Ago

Thanks Cherrie..so much appreciate your kind words on my poetry..
A fine tribute to November Winds, Fran. They sweep in with the cold, moist, greyness of winter upon their wings. Mere players in this cyclic act of Nature, they do their depressing bit, albeit dancing. The structure, the rhyming and the flow of the poem are just great. I enjoyed this read so much.

Posted 11 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

11 Months Ago

Thanks Dhara..so very much..glad you enjoyed;
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

11 Months Ago

You are welcome Fran!
I do admire those poets who experiment with structured formats. This one appears complex. November is probably one of my least favourite months and your descriptive lines remind me why. Winds, sweeping rain, coldness and naked trees. All a recipe for wanting to stay indoors. You created the atmosphere and the imagery. Well done
Fran Marie. All good wishes.

Chris

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

11 Months Ago

Thanks. Chris..I so appreciate your comments on my poetry ☺.
The way it is written is a unique style, it's beautiful and captivating. Inspired me in a very peculiar manner. Bravo

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

11 Months Ago

Thanks Suhd.
.so vey much appreciate your kind review☺
Being November my absolute favourite month first of all, I love the tittle! Then this amazing shower of beautiful words captivated my mind greatly.Excellent poem and the lovely picture makes it perfect!

Well done, Fran :-)))

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is something so mysterious about autumn, and November's awakening. The darkness falls with a chilled mist and everything begins to fall into a trance. Your poetic sighs speak this over us so well.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanka dear Craig for the great review on my poetry. I so appreciate..
well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those .. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o .. read more
  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend... read more
Amazing!

I haven't written rhyme for forever . this gem inspires.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks so vey much..
I've lost my appetite for doing structured poems, but I very much admire those who do a great job as you've done! Good autumn imagery & interesting rhymes thru-out. Most of all, I love the dynamic modifiers you use to describe each various aspects of nature (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks Margie so very much appreciated..😀

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