Winds of November

Winds of November

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Ae Feislighe Form

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Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

© 2009 Fran Marie


Author's Note

  Fran Marie
Ae Freislighe

Each line of the Ae Freislighe has seven syllables, with lines
one and three ending in triple rhymes and two and four with
double rhymes. The poem must also end as it began, either with
the first syllable, word, phrase, or line.


The Ae Freislighe is a quatrain stanza with a fixed rhyme scheme

xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)
xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)

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well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those .. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o .. read more
  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend... read more



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Beauty in words - you are such a skilled poet. Stunning images of Autumn in November you created.
Truly enchanting.

Posted 8 Years Ago


"Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn"
These first lines are my favorite and I am still enjoying this image of the wind dancing and disrobing the trees. Thanks for the introduction to this new rhyming scheme.

Posted 9 Years Ago


nice descrption of the changings of times in november.

Posted 9 Years Ago


very nicely done .. i thought this was a very beautiful and impressive piece... imagery was great and format was unique ..overall a very brillant write from u... nice job on this!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am thoroughly impressed! I haven't heard of this form before, but you seem to have done and excellent job. The poem is stunning! Its almost like a strip tease the way the way you word the disrobing of the trees. Beautiful job on this.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I applaud you for this undertaking. It gets a little tricky and sometimes confusing when following strict rhyme schemes. The rhyme is executed nicely in this poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

"Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn"

I think your verb here should be singular instead of plural. "Winds disrobe" or "Wind disrobes"...either way.


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a great way to celebrate November. Veryt little is ever done outside of Thanksgiving, but you have captured the essence of this month in this brief work. It really does not matter where you are north of the equator, this sums up November, except in those areas tropical..and Alaska...maybe Siberia...oh well it's a great poem about November anyway!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Enchantingly dark. In a good way.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

awesome poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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