Winds of November

Ae Feislighe Form

Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those lines in each stanza have three syllables..double rhyme ending words for lines two and four.. yes.. (bottom) in tbis poem is as hits bottom ..Octobers fall colors/ leafs turn brown and fall away.so yes this poem is a bit dark.. i added personification .. and yes i had to work this form for a couple of days.. but it all came together

[Einstein Noodle]

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o where is a double and triple rhyme ;} duh ..i can be pretty dense sometimes ..really appreciate my enlightenment for the day ..

[Fran Marie]

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend.😁

[Onlyme]

Fran, what amazing colours of descriptive images held within this dancing lightscape of a magical poem. That is captivating and enthralling to read and take on board.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Dawn so very much appreciate your kind words on my poetry;

[Relic's Bare Trees]

A perfect poem to witness with the mind's imagination. The words guided, I beheld the sights.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks 33.. so very much appreciated

[Crowley]

Quite an accomplished piece that made it seem formless. Graceful and full beautiful visuals and phrasing. November comes, yes she does. Loved it Fran!!!!

[Fran Marie]

Hi Crowley..thanks so vey much for the visit and review..ever so appreciated;

[angel]

I don't understand any of that technical talk, but I have been writing poetry for half a century, and I know a good poem when I read one.
Yours here is a fine one!
The first verse:

Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Just lovely, and the imagery here is...impeccable.
Beautiful write, Fran!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Angel for your kind words on this poem..I do appreciate it so. ..

[A.E. Surdam]

Absolutely beautiful. I am again reminded of fall and its drastic change from summer. As we watch nature's rebirth cycle every season, your poem is like a metaphor for that. And the lines: Fall reigns,its fate, commanding appearing dead,yet, endures. Show me that beauty regarding the constant fight between death and life. Great job!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks A.E.so very much for your kind review .I so appreciate it..

[Ana Papaya]

the form is new to me, the poem itself is lovely.
November has never been my favourite, so cold and wet around here and signs of winter.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ana so much appreciate your reading and review of my poetry

[Cherrie Palmer]

I love November from the dressed down trees to the leaves skirting through the wind.
You are a master of taking the reader with you.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Cherrie..so much appreciate your kind words on my poetry..

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

A fine tribute to November Winds, Fran. They sweep in with the cold, moist, greyness of winter upon their wings. Mere players in this cyclic act of Nature, they do their depressing bit, albeit dancing. The structure, the rhyming and the flow of the poem are just great. I enjoyed this read so much.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Dhara..so very much..glad you enjoyed;

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

You are welcome Fran!

[Chris Shaw]

I do admire those poets who experiment with structured formats. This one appears complex. November is probably one of my least favourite months and your descriptive lines remind me why. Winds, sweeping rain, coldness and naked trees. All a recipe for wanting to stay indoors. You created the atmosphere and the imagery. Well done
Fran Marie. All good wishes.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

Thanks. Chris..I so appreciate your comments on my poetry ☺.

[Suhd]

The way it is written is a unique style, it's beautiful and captivating. Inspired me in a very peculiar manner. Bravo

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Suhd.
.so vey much appreciate your kind review☺