Hurt

Hurt

A Poem by Fran Marie

I know, don't tell me
you gave me your heart 
and I treated
   it unkind 
 if only I had taken

               the time

to sift through your
  surrendered feelings 
instead of 
folding them into 
sullen shadows of a dark night 

              It might

have turned out different.
you and me ..
our dreams drowned 
in spent tea leaves
 at the bottom of a cracked cup
 made for
     a different drink of love

              
             
             
              

© 2021 Fran Marie


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Each of us is so unique that often we don't meld together, for many reasons. It seems here that harm has been done, and there may be some regrets, but it's possible that both parties have been hurt, even though one initiated it. Relationships need work all the time; and one mistake shouldn't cause a breakup, but often it does. Your emotional words add to this complicated issue. Very well written.
Best, B.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

3 Weeks Ago

Many thanks Betty I so
appreciate your kind review;
Betty Hermelee

3 Weeks Ago

You’re very welcome!



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This is exactly how mismatched I feel with many people, not just romantic endeavors. I tend to dismiss people I can't relate to, so I can see how they might feel I've been abrupt or dismissive, as your poem suggests. I love how the end of your poem kinda spirals into a messy lump of soggy tea leaves (((HUGS)))

Posted 1 Week Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Week Ago

Thanks Margie..i hear ya and those
tea leaves do make quite a mess at that
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Gee
If it ain't meant to be, it ain't meant to be :)) Good thing is there is always another mug to drink from, the bad is some folk never find a mug with contents to their liking.
Good morning Fran Marie


Posted 1 Week Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Week Ago

"If it ain't got that swing
It don't mean a thing"
good morning gee
and thanks .. read more
Gee

1 Week Ago

That tune will be in my head all day now :)
  Fran Marie

1 Week Ago

Haha Smiles (*-*)
have a great day
The eternal mystery: love, and where to find it, and why it does or doesn't work. The images and figures of speech you use here are very vivid and apt.

Posted 1 Week Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Week Ago

Thanks Laz so very much
for reading and reviewing
I appreciate
I've heard of tea leaves being used to read the future, not that I believe in such things but I've also heard the expression, "It isn't my cup of tea." I'm feeling the latter might be a more applicable idiom here. I enjoyed the poem's representation of regret. Thomas Wolfe said, We can't go home again. Maybe we can't go back but perhaps it's for the better if we learn from history and introspective reasoning and move forward. This was a good write. F.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


  Fran Marie

2 Weeks Ago

So true TW 's words we can't go home again..and yes I heard that idiom
"not my cup of tea" T.. read more
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I loved the poetry dear Fran. Reminded me of a Gypsy gal reading.
"have turned out different.
you and me ..
our dreams drowned
in spent tea leaves
at the bottom of a cracked cup
made for
a different drink of love"
The above lines. Hard honesty and so good. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks dear John..so vey much
for your words and thoughts on this one;
Coyote Poetry

1 Week Ago

I like this one dear Fran and you are welcome.
Each of us is so unique that often we don't meld together, for many reasons. It seems here that harm has been done, and there may be some regrets, but it's possible that both parties have been hurt, even though one initiated it. Relationships need work all the time; and one mistake shouldn't cause a breakup, but often it does. Your emotional words add to this complicated issue. Very well written.
Best, B.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

3 Weeks Ago

Many thanks Betty I so
appreciate your kind review;
Betty Hermelee

3 Weeks Ago

You’re very welcome!
Hi Fran Marie, Another heartfelt offering :)
Yes, sometimes it hurts as much to hurt others as to be hurt by others.
Regret, and lost chances ...written so so well,
Dylan

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks Dylan..so very much
for reading and the review;
dearest Fran... you are a soother of Hurts...
Perhaps you need to realize that it takes a
Village to save a Soul. Your kind reviews are
a Testament to your tender loving Care.
Be blessed and assured. gently, Pat

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

3 Weeks Ago

you are too kind
thank you poet friend;
Sometimes we regret the way we behaved because we are our best judge and think of other possible ways by which things could have changed drastically! This is very relatable...the last stanza is brilliant..
Very well penned..

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks Dreamer so very much
I appreciate your kind review on
my poetry
Has the sound of regrets. Nothing wrong with looking back and learning from it, but it sounds as though this one is irretrievable.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

1 Month Ago

Thanks John.. for reading and your review on my poem..much appreciated

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