One Way Ticket

contest write describe the picture

Her life; a one-ticket to nowhere, 

even the rain smiled as she frowned.

 lost and forlorn since the day 

she was born on the wrong side 

of everything.

Oh how she tried; to make 

it right oh how she cried when 

the nightmare wouldn't end.

Her hopes and dreams shattered 

as she sat in the rain waiting for

another trip to a runaway's life.

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

There is always a Reason for being born on the wrong side of the Tracks… you have to develop your own Self esteem. There are many obstacles along the way. You may be on a Run-away Train. An Angel may give you Wings when you Pray. My 💜 heart is touched. tenderly, Pat

[Fran Marie]

Thank you dear Pat for
your kind review..i so appreciate💜

[Temperance]

...."she was born on the wrong side of everything." Great line! We all have choices. We can choose to dig ourselves out of a hole, a go-no-place life. It takes work but, it can be done. One needs the right mindset and faith. This poem is fraught with distress and hopelessness but, I think that was the point. Depressing but, nice write. Temp

[Relic]

There are lost souls who never feel in harmony with their surroundings. I think you caught the feeling behind the picture well.

[Fran Marie]

Thank you Tim so much🌷

[Chris Shaw]

Some great lines in this write Fran. Some people just find themselves in this sad situation. Nothing goes to plan. Hope you are well.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Chris much appreciate
the visit and review..all is well here
same. wishes for you and yours💜

[Gee]

Sometimes no matter how you try you cannot escape the s**t hand dealt.
Hi Fran Marie hope you are keeping well.
Agree with Jacob on the line he picked out, terrific

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Gee..so true we have to play
the cards were dealt in the game of
life and try to make the best of it
doing well in KY ..hope you are too

[Betty Hermelee]

It's quite sad when you can't get out of your own shadow; it is a one way ticket to nowhere; to feel that you're on the wrong side of the track is just pitiful, and that one has felt that way for so long; it''s a prolonged sense of dread; her only hope is to run away....in the rain and find a life somewhere; great writing Fran.
Best, B

[Fran Marie]

Thanks dear Betty..for reading and your kind review on this one..much appreciate;

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome!

[LostSage]

we all seem somewhat disappointed in life....I thought it would be fun!....but nope.....too many let downs....it might as well rain, who cares.....have a nice day.....Jeff 🌸😋

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Jeff ..c'est la vie

[LostSage]

I have high regards for you lets make that clear.... I would never enter any of my poems in any contest....I don't need a grade from teacher....but guess what? if it makes you happy it makes me happy....yay yay for you and I mean it! I like your writing you get awards from me✨✨✨🎀🎀🎀

[Fran Marie]

Haha ..okay thanks Jeff
glad you like my writing
as for entering contests
different strokes for
different folks..
im addicted to them..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a line, Fran! "she was born on the wrong side of everything"
some just never have a chance from the time they emerge from the womb.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Jacob; for reading and reviewing
s o. very much appreciated

[Dylan Macadham]

Sorrowful and Appealing at the same time. You've written her beautifully, a life of defeat, and yet she's still in there, not surrendering, still trying, a portrait of Courage in its own right.
Dylan

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Dylan; so very much for
reading and kind review;