Sing a Song of Taj Mahal

Sing a Song of Taj Mahal

A Poem by S.zaynab.kamoonpury
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Celebrating Muslim architecture in my motherland India Click on top side pic to zoom the picture of the Taj

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Sing a song of Tajmahal
a fine nazm or a ghazal
Of this landmark for lovers
Ah, a lover's edifice
Complete with medieval bowers
It's a Mecca for tourists!
Tis sensational, tis exceptional
tis truly a touristy place.

Watch the shimmer of its magnificent marbled dome
Moonlight or sunlight, it glimmers of imperial chrome
It's ironical then
that though Indian-Arabian I am
I haven't yet been to this touristy place

It is truly as they must say, a lover's shrine
a place where hearts duly incline
They find it steamy
I find it dreamy
Oh, I've got to see for myself this touristy place.

Each of the marbled minarets
conceal such romantic secrets
for lovers to silently explore
to admire and to adore
A place human lovebirds couldn't ignore.
Ah you've got to visit this touristy place!

Two famed lovers lie in the legendary vault below
and the stream too it has a romantic flow
It's a lovers haven and paradise on earth
Even dead passions there undergo a rebirth
Ah, rekindle my love for you in this touristy place!

Extol I may this awesome imposing edifice
A greed for pure love is perhaps better than avarice
Löng live the legend of Shah jahan and Mumtaz mahal
Long live love and love like a Moghul
so forever we have this monumental grace!
Yeah take me my luv to this touristy place!

© 2019 S.zaynab.kamoonpury


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S.zaynab.kamoonpury
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Celebrating Muslim architecture in my motherland India

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Gosh, Zaynab!
How wonderfully your words touch my heart, on into my very core, from your poem of this wondrous, other-worldly edifice.
The earth over, the Taj Mahal is know as the crown palace of lovers, and one has to but lay eyes on its incomparable beauty to know the reason why.

Zaynab,
My respect and fondness for your poem is without question. I love Free Verse and Free Style poetry, and Rhyming Couplets … all of which you've so very deftly included in your wonderfully composed and presented poem. My hat's off to you, my fine poet friend. The only issue I have is your use of the repeated word "touristy" in describing the Taj Mahal, because it lends a kind of advertisement/material ambiance to the mood, rather than the spiritually enthralling/romantically embracing wonder that it should portray.
A far better and more appropriate word would be heavenly, glorious. enthralling, etc; to touch the places within our imaginations that will take us heart and soul to this wondrously beguiling place.
Please, replace the word "touristy" with something more appropriately deserving, complimenting, and poetic.

Other than that, I think your poem is a virtual masterpiece, and I thank you ever-so gratefully for your invitation to enjoy it with you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

S.zaynab.kamoonpury

6 Months Ago

Thanks soo much for your delightful review and constructive criticism. Your views on the Taj are ric.. read more



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More venerated and heavenly than touristy, if you ask me.

Constructed in 1632 by a Muslim Emperor and now the pride and joy of Hindu, Muslim, Christian, Sikh, Jain, Buddhist & Atheist INDIANS alike.

Famed Indian poet, Tagore relates the image of the Taj Mahal to a tear drop on the cheek of eternity. The Taj is to be revered as it testifies to the indestructibility of love in the face of ephemeral time.

In this case, the divine marble monument, by its very universal message and its magnificence has long surpassed and over-shone its builder, Shah Jahan, to assume a much greater identity, as an enduring symbol of the rich cultural heritage of the great nation, INDIA.

Posted 5 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

5 Months Ago

I admire how Tagore described it so poetically. I love your comment too Divya. Take care.
A very vivid description contained in this poem, which has a musical feel to it. The poem is somewhat free verse, but nevertheless it has a smooth flow and is easy to read and it rhymes in some places. I agree with the sentiment expressed, and you have rightly described The Taj Mahal as a monument to undying love.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Of course it is a place that lovers should grace. It was built, was it not, because of the undying love the builder had for his wife. The fact that it has become "touristy' owes to its' magnificent beauty. I must admit that it is on my own "bucket list" of places I'd like to see before I die.
Take care - Dave

Posted 6 Months Ago


dear Zaynab.. I agree with Richard... the word “touristy” should not be used not even once in your poem. It does not do justice to the lovely Taj Mahal... as touristy is much too common a term to be associated with your style of poetry.
We need to take heed of advice when given with respect and admiration. truly, Pat

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dear Zaynab... the Taj Mahal with Medieval bowers so romantic... a feeling of peace and love entwined. Your poetry has me in a dance 💃 so divine. truly, Pat

Posted 6 Months Ago


Very lovely poem about a landmark (which I didn't know about it until now). I enjoyed it. Wish I had the time to visit the place.

Posted 6 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

6 Months Ago

Oh you didn't know of it eh, you should visit it pretty poetess. Warm thanks for comment.
JungLee

6 Months Ago

Thank you!
Gosh, Zaynab!
How wonderfully your words touch my heart, on into my very core, from your poem of this wondrous, other-worldly edifice.
The earth over, the Taj Mahal is know as the crown palace of lovers, and one has to but lay eyes on its incomparable beauty to know the reason why.

Zaynab,
My respect and fondness for your poem is without question. I love Free Verse and Free Style poetry, and Rhyming Couplets … all of which you've so very deftly included in your wonderfully composed and presented poem. My hat's off to you, my fine poet friend. The only issue I have is your use of the repeated word "touristy" in describing the Taj Mahal, because it lends a kind of advertisement/material ambiance to the mood, rather than the spiritually enthralling/romantically embracing wonder that it should portray.
A far better and more appropriate word would be heavenly, glorious. enthralling, etc; to touch the places within our imaginations that will take us heart and soul to this wondrously beguiling place.
Please, replace the word "touristy" with something more appropriately deserving, complimenting, and poetic.

Other than that, I think your poem is a virtual masterpiece, and I thank you ever-so gratefully for your invitation to enjoy it with you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

S.zaynab.kamoonpury

6 Months Ago

Thanks soo much for your delightful review and constructive criticism. Your views on the Taj are ric.. read more
S,
This truly one of your best! You brought me there!
T

Posted 7 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

7 Months Ago

Aw I'm so glad you think so poet Kentuck! Thanks so much for comment!
so very lovely and beautiful, gorgeous expressions and thoughts, Your love is shown, felt and flowing through Your words, it's as though a magical touch of love's healing caressing us from Your words. Thank You for sharing this amazing piece my dear friend.

Posted 7 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

7 Months Ago

Ah warmest thanks for your delightful comment, I'm touched that you feel my admiration for this edif.. read more
You paint a splendid image and welcoming mood with this poem. We can see the beauty and feel the warmth from past and present. A truly enjoyable experience.

Posted 7 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

7 Months Ago

And thanks soo much for such a nice lofty comment, wow yes it's a past and present edifice indeed. H.. read more

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