The Deepest Part

Haiku

 

A   river   runs   free

 

      the deepest part of me flows

 

                              with ev'ry ripple

Reviews

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I definitely like this haiku. This is the best kind of work, in fact, because I learned something by reading it. "ev'ry" I never thought to do this with words of that type. I could think of many haikus where I could have written better by saving just one syllable. What do you call that, when you write a word like 'every' as "ev'ry?"
Thank you so much!

[beefjerky]

i like how you seem to let your feelings flow in this poem... the picture is a really good match for your work too... good work!

[Alaska Frost]

Love this haiku! great connection to yourself and the river...Good luck in my contest!

[Kt]

This is truly beautiful. I've come to like haikus recently, but it's hard to find really well-written ones. Good job.
~Kt~

[Salvatore Buttaci]

I like the connection between the river and the poet. We are very much those ripples, and like the river, we are never the same water from moment to moment.

Sal

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Fran that was a beautiful Haiku. Few words with a lot to say.


Good job as always.

[Adrian K. Smith]

A curious expression of freedom and contentment in the journey of life, the flow continues on, feeling each ripple to the very depths, yet flowing on.

[AK]

Haiku huh? I really like this, very short but very powerful. I need to study haiku to gain an understanding of the style and rules, I'd like to try it. Especially if I could come up with something half as good as this little beauty.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

You have nailed a wonderful Hokku (Haiku) format, which compliments the black and white photo beautifully. Great write!

Phill(ozofee)

[Tony Hwilka]

Like it, very short and sweet. I hate poems that go on and on and you forgot what you read by the time you got to the end. GOOD JOB