A Winter's Dream

 

Christmas tonight wears a gown of white snow
as rising winds play tune in gay delight
a plump moon spotlights her dance from afar
In awe I gaze upon a stellar show
my eyes transfixed by this magical sight 
as midnight skies display fiery stars
 
Ah, in slumber's dream,these visions rewind
to winter's wonderland of Christmas night
suddenly transported to where they are
a mystical flight to a distant time
so far
 


 

Reviews

[Ria Benthil]

The traditional imagery was depicted beautifully within the Christmas theme. In some aspects, the detail was simple, but it also maintained classy with additional spice of words. Christmas is personified as an elegant maiden of white; bringing the yule tide spirit of the enchanting holiday. The first stanza portrays Christmas during the time she spends on earth; an unseen epitome of what the celebration represents. Within the second stanza, the first line indicates how the spirit maiden returns each year; "in slumber's dream, these visions rewind." The last few lines suggest that the origin is perhaps an enigma. It is possibly the most appealing because the poem does not concentrate on a particular purpose of the holiday whether it is religious or simply a different meaning. In this manner, it enables the poem to be open ended.

Overall, I found it to be traditional yet it still maintained a free living atmosphere.

[Matching Socks]

What an enchanting moment you've captured, this is lovely!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ana , so vey much,

[Akshat♥]

very nice poem....congrats for winning the contest...

[Haley Smith]

Your grasp of language is truly amazing. This poem flows wonderfully and there is a TON of imagery! Very beautiful and even somewhat relaxing. Great write :)

[SM Davis]

Very nice imagery! It reads smoothly, and is mechanically sound. Nicely done. 100 daisies for intent and imagery.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem

[Hope]

I have always loved your poems! They are so fluent in words and delicate in tone! So beautiful!

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations on winning the sonnet contest.

Sal

[JohnL]

Lovely poem. I am sorry there were only three entries, as this proved an interesting discipline and I learrned much (thanks Ivor). Also, an honour to be allowed to follow (like Wenceslaus' page), in the footsteps of Gerard Manley Hopkins, who spent the most fruitful years and some of the happiest and saddest years of his all too short life near where I live.
Well Fran Marie, you just tip the scales on this for me and I give you my vote in a close contest, I think with Ivor. Is this the place to vote? - I couldn't find a more formal looking ballot.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Great piece!