Call the pack

It's about lonliness

howl, howl, howl to the moon
howl in a midnight tune

howl since you're wild and free
howl like it were meant to be

howl till it's very late
howl because it's your fate

howl from the depth of your brain
howl out all the anguish and pain

Howl from the top of a stone
howl that you're all alone

Howl for you miss your pack

howl howl and hope another lone wolf 
hears you and howls back.

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Reviews

[Rye]

I really enjoyed this write, This is so very good. Love the rhyme scheme a lot. Awesome writing here...

[Frederika]

Thank you Ryanna.

[Chris Shaw]

You gave me some great imagery here of a lone wolf howling to the moon. Silhouette on moonshine. Nicely conveyed lines about loneliness.

Chris

[Frederika]

thank you for your read and your comment

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome. :)

[emipoemi]

.....I have no idea where to begin, this is so great. I love the repetition, and the rhymes never seem forced, and that ending is kil-ler!! The only critique I need to give, if you'll allow, is that a few lines have musicality issues, and it would be better if they were tweaked accordingly:

- "Howl because it's your fate" (the musicality has gone a certain way up until this point, and because this is the second line of the stanza, it's especially necessary to continue the same flow. "Because" has the stress on the second syllable, and in order for the musicality to flow more smoothly with this line, you would need a word with the stress on the first syllable. Example: "given", "knowing").

- "howl out all the anguish and pain" ("all" is one syllable too many, and is not necessarily needed to add power)

- In the last stanza, Line 1, I see that you're trying to echo the first line, but the last line can't exactly accommodate that echo. Lose the second "howl", no power is lost, and you fix the musicality, which adds power and charm to the piece.

Other than that, well done. Much enjoyed.

[Frederika]

Thank you. You critique is both flattering and constructive.I will read it again tomorrow and perhaps rewrite those stanzas.

[emipoemi]

my pleasure. good luck.