Count your blessings

about appreciating what we have

Count your blessings

 

We look at the challenges we are facing

How constantly problems are pressing

At how trials are stressing

Subdued in them, we forget to count our blessings

 

We look at the bad

We are super scared

We worry, we tarry

We throw no party

As if we are blind;

We seek but can’t find

The joy in being alive

We seldom celebrate life.

 

Oh men, will you try to live

Forgetting not how lucky you are

Appreciating what you have

It may not seem so important when we have it

Because we have it, a little ungrateful

But imagine how worse it’d be if we lacked it.

Think of why those without it crave it.

Then turn around, hug it and embrace it.

Author's Note

comments and advice are welcome
Fredyman100

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Welcome to Writers'Café, Fredyman … I hope you enjoy it here, finding the atmosphere friendly, enjoyable, and constructive.
You've composed and shared a very wise and thoughtful admonishment in verse — one we surely would do well to heed.
This piece, though showing promise, needs a bit of attention to the following details to make it really shine: Structure … work on more exacting rhymes, even the line count for smoother flow, make the font a size larger for ease of reading.
Grammar … punctuation lacks, why unnecessarily begin every line with a capital(?), speak with stronger poetical voice (use more original word choices and order of arrangement).

I think your message is clear and concise, expressing your good heart and care toward your fellow-man, for how we live and treasure life (or fail to), and how we should value what we have when compared to how destitute we could be.

A fine effort, Fredyman, that I enjoyed very much … thank you sincerely for sharing! ⁓ Richard

[Fredyman100]

Thanks a lot for the review, and for being frank. I can now see what I didn't see at first and will do what I can to make a change