Let Me Help

My Song I Tried To Create One Night,Tell Me Whatca Think. As you can tell,i am not very good at this and had writers block and i also need helpful criticism.

Just Let Me Help You
Just This One Time!
You May not want it
But I see you need it!

 

I Noticed, All This Anger,
(Is Just A Plot To Get Me)
You Breathe no bad air,
(Ive come here to help you!)

 

Spring From The Shadows!
Im here for all your needs!
Just Meet Me halfway,
And Let Me Know!

 

Walk Around!
See what life's ment to be,
Everyone and everything around you,
May Seem Not So Good,
Just try and stay alittle longer,
(I know you could!)

 

I Can Be Here for you,

 

In Beauty!

 

In Sorrow!

 

I cant see a dim light in you,

 

May It!

 

Burn Through!

 

The darkness That May Try And Stop You!

Spread Your Wings And fly,Let no one stop you,
(For Here i have Come To Guide You)

 

Notice All These Things,
They each Give a simple glow,
Memories Of What Had Been done,
Paved The path of what you know.

Let Me Bring You The Beauty You may need,
The Sorrow You May Feel,
(Im whatever you need)
As Long As Its Helps You!

 

Anger!

 

Envy!

 

Nothing Seems To Connect Right,

 

Never!

 

Let It!

 

Consume Your Mind!

 

I Can Be Here for you,

 

In Beauty!

 

In Sorrow!

 

I cant see a dim light in you,

 

May It!

 

Burn Through!

 

The darkness That May Try And Stop You!

 

Author's Note

Please Give good Criticism and not just your opinion ^_^

Reviews

[FreeFlow]

thanks both of you ^_^,this really brightens my day.

[Mitch*Dandy]

Soo nice a kind... I should say sweet! Ha! Well nice! =)

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem was well written and I saw only one simple error. Need a space on one coma. I like the feel and kindness in the poem.
Coyote