From ashes a Phoenix will

I'm trying new things, work in progress...

 

I was here in the dawn, and my spirit will burn till the end.

  From flames I spawn, for from my ashes I transcend…

 

 

 

I was by the garden when Adam was banished, that is when the burn came from within.

  My thoughts were anguished with his thoughts of sin…

 

 

 

I rise from the flames of those before me to one day be the ashes for those who follow.

  From high above I will always see, and trails of knowledge I leave for tomorrow…

 

 

 

I regenerate from all the pains of life and move forward to become complete in flight.

  My will continues in thee afterlife… For I am the fire of the sun and the light...

 

 

 

I resurrect with the glory of light to guide my path.

  From the skies I interject folklore, sparking life once again from thee aftermath...

 

 

 

I become a symbol of inspiration to all that could see the trails of knowledge I leave.

 My myth becomes my classification. So free I will be, until my flames unweave.

 

 

 

I am born to lead without a choice, for I am one with he…

  From ashes I again raise my voice, as I am reborn within history.

 

 

 

I

 M...

 

 

(too)

 

Rise…

 

   12/02/08 -San

 

Author's Note

ignore grammar problems, what do you think of the dialogue, etc.

If, I'm to Rise. If,I'm,If,I'm...

Reviews

[Nautili]

San, you did realize that you had IF I'M (to) RISE? How cool is that? Good work, really great pattern......love the phoenix rising from the ashes allegory.....really fits where you are right now, rebuilding your life, creating new pieces, exploring new horizons! keep up the good work-some great lines in there,one example---I rise from the flames of those before me to one day become the ashes for those who follow.......great rendition of the cycle of life!
jo

[Helena]

"I was here in the dawn, and my spirit will burn till the end.

From flames I spawn, for from my ashes I transcend�"

I have read many writes from poets over the past few years about the Phoenix and have even
written one myself but I have misplaced it. I just love that Phoenix Bird...so powerful and
inspirational.

This is exceptional writing. I loved your expression and the stepping "outside the circle"
so to speak, and trying new things.

Well done and a jolly good read my friend. Keep up the good work.

Helena

[ANNA]

WOW!! Ya well, I'm i don't know how to say this but I felt like I was there with you. Burns my soul. This was very strong and the words were brilliantly thought out!! Amazing job with trying something out of your zone. you did an wonderful write

Much love n respect,
Anna

Love the formate too!!

[269]

Beautiful! perhaps an introduction to a larger work? charly

[None]

Besides the hopeful Phoenix story you give us so much more here. You tie in history and this would make a great basis for a song also. Well written with an imaginative flair.

[Wicahpi]

Very nicely done Santos!

[Ghost of Jupiter]

simply beautiful... wonderful concept and flow. I am excited to continue reading your work. Thank you for allowing me to do so with your invite.

~Kalypso

[Ruby Moon]

:)
this is really well written
the sentences and the way you described the phoenix...
and it seems as though you are the phoenix and making a statement
i might fall, but i will rise again and again...

[chloe cruz]

Really well done... May I say it was dramatic? It seemed like I kept on wondering these things... that, well I haven't thought about for years. This reminded me of my past, I guess you could say. This was astonishing. Wonderful! Great job, again San!

[San Herman Lopez a.k.a...]

Thank you Jo Pfohl!!! (to) works for me...

[Katreya]

Ooh that's gorgeous! I'm not much of a poet, but I like!! =D
When I saw the patterns, it struck me as a "If" "I'm" as well as the I, from, I, my. X]