You'll Know When You're Here

The title poem. This is intended to encompass the idea of the book.

A demanding climb

Rigorous treading through rock and sage

Rivulets of loose dirt

To wash you back down

 

Steep ascent

All is laid out

Blanket of valley

Where no one cares

 

That’s when it hits you

When you are ‘here’

Silence

So deafening and pure

 

You’ll know when you hear it

That you clawed up from this dirt

Irreverent spitting dust

From a parched tongue

 

Eye the sun

Nestled here

Pressed between stone and sky

Remember your origin

Author's Note

This is the opening poem, so it needs to catch the readers attention and give them the feeling for the book. Any and all feedback is welcome, please don't be gentle!! I'm always looking for ways to improve my writing and to find out how it appears to the reader vs. how it appears to me.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem. The words demanding and strong.
"You’ll know when you hear it
That you clawed up from this dirt
Irreverent spitting dust
From a parched tongue"
The above lines were my favorite. A parched tongue won't tell no lies. Thank you dear Sarah for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Sarah Cristobal]

Thank you Coyote! Those are honestly my favorite lines as well. I like that power of being a part of somewhere, like the dust and dirt just makes up your bones, even if no one cares about you, you're still a part of the land itself.

Sarah

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree dear Sarah and you are welcome. Hello from Michigan.

[Chris Shaw]

I imagined a tough climb up the slopes of a mountain, dislodging dirt as my my feet moved further and watching it fall below. Pausing on the rock face in the eye of the sun. Exhilarating, looking around and drinking up the quietness. Quite an achievement to reach the summit of a mountain where the air is thinner and the view must be spectacular. Your lines took me there and I benefitted from some lovely imagery. Thank you for sharing.

Chris.

[Sarah Cristobal]

Thank you so much for reading and leaving feedback Chris! I really find reaching that summit special, spiritual even. I'm glad my words were able to convey that.

Sarah

[Tina]

Good poem , like your going through a trail of nature or climbing a mountain.

[Sarah Cristobal]

Thank you Tina! Glad it brought up exactly the image I was going for.

[Kerra]

I enjoyed this write, very nicely written

[Sarah Cristobal]

Thank you Kerra!