The Captain's Dance

The Captain's Dance

A Poem by Zack Burton

I hate writing about high concepts. The horror of war? Death? Let's see what you think.


The shock, so long we lived in fear

Absconding thoughts through every year

How could we ever think we knew

Whatever put our trust in you?

You monster, gladly put your name

With every death, explode your fame

With fire, the age is at its start

And every maiden stabs her heart

For knowing that the war is here

Brings pain and anger, doubt and fear

What is it now, an awful game?

Where is the target of your aim?

Belial, saint of sure corruption

Bring out your hate and soul destruction

For if we have one thing to say

It is that death is here to stay

I see and hear the screeching flame

And then my eyes behold the dame

Oh, God - Oh, Lord, look at him now

With all his might he takes a bow

The act is over, but not the play

He'll have their tears replayed today

It is with perdition that she came

To tear apart our captain's frame

The captain's dance may suck our souls

As we watch his body grow full of holes

The monster, she is wholly willing

To bring his death, his blood distilling

And now she's gone, but who's to blame?

We brought her with us, behold our shame

© 2011 Zack Burton

Author's Note

Zack Burton
Thanks to any reviews. I love you all.

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very good, when I started reading this poem I immediatly thought of Hitler, the end of the poem is probably what all the Jews wish someone would have been brave enough to do to him before the war ended.

Posted 12 Years Ago

It's fantastic. I wish I had a more in depth review, but I really liked the poem overall.

Posted 12 Years Ago

behold the shame would be right kudos

Posted 12 Years Ago

I agree, It flows beautifully and the rhyming was wonderful :). The poem was riveting. I read it several times XD . Great Job :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

Blissfully coherent and relaxed, a gripping time ad perfect flow, nicely done, good read, great job

Posted 12 Years Ago

I had to read this twice. Not because I couldn't understand it, but because I liked it so much the first time. This is amazing! It flows well and has great imagery. Great Job!

Posted 12 Years Ago

I like this! Great flow and rhyming. Sort of mysterious too.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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7 Reviews
Added on April 17, 2011
Last Updated on April 17, 2011
Tags: death, war, female, personification, blood, guns, bullets, fire


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