I Hope He Heard Me

the last time i saw him(for Gene)

i stood at his bedside…

afraid

Hope stayed just outside the door

alongside Death,

who had come to collect its prize

Fate rested with him

but was quickly fleeting

the air was hot and stale…

you could taste Life leaving the room

Time drastically slowed itself

seconds became hours

mere minutes… days

my eyes wanted to leave him

but my heart wouldn’t let them

i searched my spirit for courage

and found none

the room began to spin

while he remained still...

the center of a moment

that was killing the two of us

eagerly, Death crept closer toward him

standing just behind me

heralding its impending crowning moment

the trumpets of demise blared loudly

he, my hero… my Brother

was quiet… so… so… quiet

and i stood there--- staring

with fear filled eyes

that left no place for tears

Time began to speed up

Life was resigning its thrown

Fate promptly stood in front of me

urging that 2^nd chances were things of yesterday…

for today, belonged only to Death

Hope hastily made its way to me

bringing the courage I couldn’t find

it’s there… in that space

where Life gives way to Death

that I spoke to him…

(final indebted words of a little brother)

i just hope he heard me

Author's Note

Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[Renée]

He heard every word luv.... thank you for sharing these thoughts with us

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... i appreciate you reading and reviewing it.

[Renée]

my pleasure to read your work..an honor to read your brotherly love

[Sami Khalil]

A good sorrowful piece and very touching...Sorry for your loss...:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, bro... i appreciate that. i have to be very honest... your piece, Hero University made me sit down and complete this piece. Its been sitting unfinished for over two years, my pen hand must have been afraid to complete it. So, much thanks to you and your craft!

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. That is good to know...You are welcome...I like your honesty...:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

No problem... as you can gather from the piece, I've learned to extend my appreciation while those recieving it can fully absorb it.

[Sami Khalil]

I did...You are welcome...:)

[Rogue]

I am sure he heard you. You obviously loved him and he took that feeling from you and knowledge with him.

This is a very detailed and heartfelt piece. You are quite good at getting your feelings and emotions across through your words.

And I am sorry to read of your loss. :(

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, i appreciate that... and the kind review. He was the only man who i thought could fly. This piece is about the last time i saw him, my only regret that day... was not telling him those things sooner.

[Rogue]

Sometimes it is not always what you say, but the things that you do.

And that was a very kind thing to say to Sami as well. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

You are absolutely right... and I only said what was true, his piece hit very close to home. Reading it, I connected with my own emotion for my brother.

[Rogue]

Hon, Sami is my buddy. I just wanted you to know I appreciated the compliment you extended him. That was all. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Allow me to apologize, the tone of my response is a bit off. Sorry if it came off rude, i meant no offense. Ah, the complexity of words... I truly intended my reply in the kindest of manners.