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for my lil bro... the military man

                                    Here I stand

                   My brethren scattered at my feet

            I stand as they stood, brave and unflinching

             And I stand to die, as they died... fighting

Author's Note

For my lil bro... being redeployed today. I love you and want you to return home safely. Directly beside you, or otherwise...I'm always with you and you with me.

Reviews

[Shaun Payton]

I pray he returns safely. The sentiment is a strong united brotherhood, that should be encouraged, displayed, and talked about.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you very much... its beyond appreciated.

[Shaun Payton]

You are most welcome Poetic Heroics.

[Peter H]

wow sounds very heroic , you can put this as a speech within war fantasy novel or manga , good lines great weite :) and i pray for your brother also

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, I appreciate both sentiments, my good friend.

[Cool Handless Luke]

16 yrs army for me. only 1 deployment. I appreciate his service and I applaud you writing and supporting him. I wrote quite a few military pieces on here inspired by my deployment. What's his MOS? Infantry, supply etc? "Unflinching" is the word that stands out in this piece. That's where the power is...brothers dying and he stands unflinching. A great testament to your brother and the love and respect you have for him. Hoo-ah!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, I appreciate the great review. My bro is in the Navy, second deployment; not sure of his current rank as it just changed before he left. I'm working on a much more personal piece for him regarding his leaving, I would like your input on it when it's complete.

[Cool Handless Luke]

It would be an honor!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I will be sure to send you the read request when its posted.

[Cool Handless Luke]

Good deal. I am at your page now checking out another poem.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Now, the honor is mine. I appreciate you taking time to view my work.

[Cool Handless Luke]

My real name is Jeff by the way. I know you were thinking Cool handless was a funny first and middle name! I have been on here since 2009 so it's always great to read new stuff!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I was thinking they were pretty awesome. lol My name is, Travis its a pleasure. I'm new here, but hope to learn from all the great writers I have been encountering.

[Cool Handless Luke]

I have learned plenty in my time here. It's a great way to read and be read. There will be some critics who will nitpick your grammar or spelling or punctuation or even your font size! if you want that kind of critique i will send you a message and point out some misspelled words etc if i see them - as a perfectionist i know it would bug me if i spelled something wrong or whatever so i will point it out in a message if that's what you want. but as for the poetry itself i really ignore all that stuff. poetry to me is being real. pouring out your heart and soul on the paper. your blood, sweat and tears. opening up about heartbreaks etc even if it means showing you can be hurt. being real is what poetry is to me. but like i said, there are some here who think they have the blueprint for perfection and there is a format and scheme you have to follow for it to be poetry. i avoid structure and formats just for the sake of appearances. i ignore rules if my heart is leading me somewhere in my words. an editor can punctuate for you or correct your mistakes. only you can put your heart and soul out there in words - that's where the power and the beauty lies. sorry to ramble. lol

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

lol... Its not a problem, bro. I appreciate the insight. I will have little issue with any tough critics in regards to my writing; hence, my writing. Poetry to me, is expression. What ever the mind/heart wants to say... LET IT OUT! Throw rules and formats out the window... let them go to the writers who want them. I write mostly narrative poetry, but i change it up every now and again to challenge my ability. Who can tell any one writer or person that their expression is wrong? Pompous, is the only word that comes to mind for that kind of thing.

[Cool Handless Luke]

I agree. And they are on this site but for the most part every one here is pretty cool. You can look at some profile pages and they will list all of their awards for this poem or that etc and talk about how gifted they are etc...when the truth is if we were top of the line authors we wouldn't be on here now would we? lol

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

lol Very true.

[Stella Armour]

a strong poem for a brave man.. they are all heroes.. a special breed.This is a lovely tribute to your brother.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, i appreciate the wonderful review.

[Sirius King]

I have much respect for all who serve in the military, i pray for your brothers safe return as well

this is a great tribute to him

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, I appreciate that more than I can say.

[Sirius King]

my pleasure :-)

[Rogue]

Very solid and well worded. Even in four lines the imagery is strong.

Best wishes to you brother on a safe trip and a timely return home. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Rogue i truly appreciate that. I'm so used to protecting him, but these moments always remind me of how much of his own man he is.

[Rogue]

Younger siblings can be much like one's own children.. Eventually they grow up and you just have to let go. The power of the almighty "Because I SAID SO that's why" doesn't work anymore. Damnit! -shakes a fist-

Ah well, those were the days. Now we just sit as spectators in the cheap seats and observe. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Isn't that the truth... thanks for that, Rogue. I needed to hear that.