Alive Tonight

The sky is a black blanket in the night

There’s walls of sky into which the dark slammed

But stars that shine with an endless light

Glint with hope for those consumed, for the damned

 

The smoke of bright flames reflects in glazed eyes

A shout, an echo �" and then not a word

Regret the misfortune of those who lied

For truths they tell can no longer be heard

 

A boy dances on his toes through the skies

His laughter liberates the charcoal night

The people below watch with bloodshot eyes

He winks for the second star to the right

 

Morning breaks free of the eternal night

Forgiving, forgetting, hope comes with light

Reviews

[Rahul]

The IInd stanza's great and nicely penned, words're nice. and you've well written indeed.
you've written damn nicely as you'd writtn in your that earlier one writing :)

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You are an artist of words. I've only had time to read your poems, but I look forward to checking out your stories.

[CalicoWoolfe]

Amazing. It painted a vivid picture in my Mind

[A.r. Bazian]

i'd suggest "hope comes again with light!
now this is a lot more to my liking! the theme is great, and the imagery is vivid! its a good piece! and could be a masterpiece!

i will send you my suggestions.

all in all, this is quite good!
and i enjoyed it!

[David W Moore III]

I like the stars glinting with hope for the damned. Maybe one glints for me. Nice read. Just enough mystery to be thought provoking without being needlessly obtuse. Like it

[Robert]

you did a pretty good job i enjoyed it :) if i have any advice i would have liked to seen more colorful words, and more emotions

[Cherrie Palmer]

...The smoke of bright flames reflects in glazed eyes... I hope more people find this , it is a wonderful read.