Rachel Can't Cry Now

 

 

 

If I believed in salvation

I’d pray for you.

The cold trickle down your face

And blood on your arms

But yet I’m days away…

Always stuck in this void

In which I cannot reach you…

 

You say you’re not worth being saved

That nobody cares

I always say to hold on

That I’ll always love you

And yet your sorrow stays…

“I don’t need anybody,” she said

But as this rain falls

I feel you presence longing

For a hand to hold.

And I still can’t touch you

But I’m always with you

My heart with yours.

 

Your tears continue to stream forth

Like a river that merges

With the hate and disgust

On your wrists

As another heart lies shattered and bruised

Your presence slowly fades

Eyes go white, the tears stop falling

I hope you’re happy now

Wherever you may be…

Now you’ll never cry again.

Author's Note

i was gonna turn this into a story but didn't..should i?

Reviews

[xlynne]

i love the way he cares for her, i'm like obsessed/fascinated with relationships so i always like reading poems where relationships like that are displayed

[K. N. Graf]

completely amazing!!! i love your use of words and how the make an image in my mind. brilliant.

[x.music.is.life.x]

I like it as is.
I think if you turned it into a story, that it would honestly end up being cheesy....perhaps you can execute it well, but i just don't see it turning into a story.
really good though.
you're very good with imagery.

[Rachel Lieberman]

Who's this about?!

[Karen Renee]

I think you should turn this into a story. I like it a lot!!!

[Wendy in Realityland]

=O your soo gewd shaney :D but if it is really bout rach, then i dunno, maybe you should make a story, it'd prolly help you cope better, and it'd be interesting ^_^, but at the same time, it could just hurt.. beautiful poem though