I Stand Alone

I stand alone on weakened feet
On the darkest shore of the wide earth
I hear my weary heart skip a beat
Searching for the purpose of my birth

Cutting my soul with swords of grief
Leaving my body lifeless and cold
Red tears falling on the dying leaf
How to face this pain I'm left untold

Which road now I should take?
Should I walk on the Sandy shore?
Or once again a mistake I will make
Choosing the darkest path to the door?

Memories of pain and darkness is all I can think
Now I'm praying for hope to save me before I sink

Author's Note

Edited and helped by S.Mi... Wrote almost a month ago...

Reviews

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Lots of pain in this one IP.
Almost feels like you're giving up...
Don't.

[Inject Positivity]

Thank you Ivy, don't worry I won't give up. I have seen the highest stage of grief and I'm still here, so I won't give up anymore... At least not very soon...

[Sapientiam]

I like the little bit of hope at the end... Because it may save us.

The reason for existence is the eternal question... The longer we live, the more we question. During our lifetime, pain will come forth, regardless of who you are. We need to experience pain to grow stronger, so that we can confront struggles. It's hard to deal with, but it's necessary... Sometimes, I wish it would go away! Though, you gradually appreciate pain the more you lose in life...

Great job, as usual!

[Inject Positivity]

Pain has been a life long companion in my life and I'm quite used to it now. But I think there is always a chance for things to get better and I'm holding on to that hope... Very happy to read your words on my page frnd...

[Sapientiam]

Yeah, I can understand that. Funerals are pretty commonplace in my family, so either I laugh at death or accept it in contentment, which is kind of messed up now that I think about it... O_O"... Anyways, I do think that everyone's life has the potential to get better, if we allow such a thing to happen. Pain can break us just as much as it can break us.

[Saumya]

Although a short piece, yet it displays deep, unbearable loss of the assets of the narrator's life. Normally it becomes very hard to describe pain in words, but when this same feelings get deeper, and we can't actually express it with anyone, this same pen heals, by letting out the words, makes pain flow on the paper, and cures us in a way we hadn't thought of.
I'm glad you managed expressing your pain on a paper, instead of ruining your heart, mind and soul because of it in the time of distress.

Pain, is inevitable. We all lose our loved ones someday, some lose them early, and some late, but that doesn't really mean, that we have to lose hope, and question our existence. God, certainly has some plans for everyone, and he does things accordingly.Never lose hope, and have faith in God.
If he's took your assets away from you, he'll be the the one who'll pull you out of this mess....stay strong...stay positive and hopeful!

I really liked the flow, originality & the rhyming of this piece.
Thanx for sharing.:)

Happy writing!

-Saumya

[Inject Positivity]

One of the most beautiful reviews I have got so far... Thank you for being such an inspiring frnd... He does not make mistakes, He knows what He is doing, so if He had taken something from me, He will give me the hope of finding something more... Thank you very much Saumya...

[Saumya]

You're welcome! :)

[GreenShoes]

What a relief to realize you wrote this a month ago. I was getting worried while reading it. I hope you are feeling a bit better now; this poem is quite dark. Nothing wrong with dark poetry, of course, and poetry doesn't have to be autobiographical, but it did spark concern on my part. It's a well-written poem, nicely rhymed, and a good expression of emotion. I just feel bad when someone questions the purpose of their birth. God doesn't make mistakes. God loves you, we all do.

[Inject Positivity]

I hope I did not scare you too much Karen. I'm getting through life better than I was couple of weeks ago. I'm focusing on the good once again, one step at a time... Hopefully I can see it through... Glad to have you here...

[AnayaJ.]

It's a wonderful poem that accurately describes the feelings of grief and confusion. Extremely relatable. Good job :))))

[Inject Positivity]

Thank you for your understanding review frnd...