I Am That Man

I wrote this mainly for myself. I didn't bother to make it flow or rhyme, I just typed what came to me. I'm not changing it so don't bother with any suggestions.

I can’t do this
This is no life
I am a walking shade
A reject
A flaw
I don’t belong here
I have never belonged
This world rejected me
Now I reject it
I’m like a man lost in the ocean
Struggling to stay above the water
Trying not to drown
Trying to stay alive
Even though he knows
He has no chance of rescue
He is alone
No one is coming
He is alone
The waves are getting bigger
He delays the inevitable
A floating corpse
Found too late
Perished alone
I am that man    
 

Reviews

[Winter McPherson]

This is so sad! Free flowing poems are some of my favorite because they come straight from the heart, as this did. These lines speak of such utter hopelessness and despair. Captured wonderfully in the illustration of a drowning man. If it really is how you feel then my wish for you is that you find the peace and joy of God's eternal love.

[Chandler Seven]

pain and desperation abounds in this poem!
It illustrated the morbid, cruel feeling that is elicited by rejection and isolation. and ironically, you are not alone.
Perfect work my friend...

[poet2angels (lynda)]

This is beautiful and perfect...So much emotion
I love every line and I would not change a thing...
(((hugs)))

Lynda

[Isolophobe]

Great imagery, really elicits a lot of emotion and a desperation that can't be expressed many other ways.

[Chuck]

No suggestions would be needed anyway

I think this is exactly right the way it is, In my own way I think I can feel what you are saying

Poems should be written more often without going over every detail

This is a great write..