~ Better Than Two~

A Parody-sattire-hybrid of "How to Kill a Mockingbird".." The Sneetches" -( a Dr. Suess story )and the state of misssing ..what God has for us ..by being wrapped up in "SELF" and the horse n' pony show.

Far away on the shores of the isle of Foo, lived a dude by the name of Bo Riddley O’ Roo .

Who just got a pair of shiny new shoes.

The best thing about pairs, is they “All” come in twos.

 

Off to the Cathedral… off.to Mass Riddley went., smiling ,quite happy with the money he spent..

With his very 1st step off the curb…well ..he stepped in some goo.

 Some goo on the tip of his new left shoe, Bo sat down on that curb to think just what to do. 

Bo Riddley wiped and he scrubbed and he rubbed at that goo;finally he quit  and said, “no can do!”

Now someone else ..might  get that seat in his favorite pew.

 

A few blocks down lived a cat named Big Muhammad McMoo .

Who was on “his” way to the Mosque,. in “HIS ” shiny new shoes.

He came upon Bo at the curb…and he  stepped  into ,the very same goo.

Squish …ooze went the goo on the tip of Muhammad's brand-new “right” shoe.

 

Dirty shoes at the Mosque!, no ! that never would do !

There they sat and they scrubbed and they rub- rubbed McMoos' shoe .

They gave up in a bit and cried out …”no can do!”.

That goo…would NOT come off the tip ...of that new shiny shoe.

 So, Mc Moo sat next to Bo on the curb with no clue what to do.

 

Not long had they sat pondering the goo on their shoes,

when along came a youngster named  “Barak- Braxton-Boo.” 

Who was “ blind-as-a-bat” since before he was two.

Not only blind was he, but... that boy had no SHOES !

With no shoes and  his cane came the lil' blind-Boo.

Tap-tapping his way 'till he came to these two.

Before they had time to explain  the ado.

The youngster said,” no need, I know alllllll about you!” 

I've come with a solution, I.. SEE... just what to do!”

 

“SEE ?”....said the pair. “You comedian you,

 we know you've been blind since before you were two! “.

“Blind, but not lame”, said Barak,

I'll go to the Cathedral and then to the Mosque,

to tell them to come get you, that you're neither missing nor lost”.

All in the wink of an eye, and then I'll be back!”

 

“Sounds great to me!” said Muhammad,”what do you think O' Roo? “.

 I agree”, said his partner,,”but the boy  has no shoes!”.

“ No shoes!”said Mc Moo, come here kid , this one has no goo.”

Braxton-Boo sat right down and slid on that “left”shoe .

“Hey wait! Said Bo-Riddley ! I wanna help too”,

he slid over a bit and handed the youngster, his new shiny “right” shoe.

 

“Great idea! “,said Blind-Braxton”, here's what we'll do.

Let's call a cab!, all the  quicker I'll  get  to the Mosque and send them for  you !”.

 Of course.... I have no money, unnnnless …perhaps YOU do ? “

The duo coughed up half a hundred, and winced, “will this do ?”.

“It should “, said the youngster ," Hey "...I'll bring your “offerings too? “

“Pretty smart for a blind kid

who's better than you? “

they said ,as they handed over their offering too .

 

Away drove the cab with Blind Barak-Braxton-Boo….

with all their money in cab fare, offerings  too

and ½ of BOTH  of their pairs..... of  shiny new shoes.

All night the pair waited for the return of Blind Boo.

Sunrise came and they waited ..

each only wearing one shoe,

sitting there on that curb where they'd first stepped in that goo.

 

Along came the Priest and the Mosque-Minister too.

“There you are… you two fools, we’ve been looking for you “.

 A little blind boy sent us here, said he saw you sitting stuck in some goo?”

 

So ends the story of Bo-Riddley-Roo

who met up with the likes of Muhammed Mc Moo,

And let a  blind -boy runoff with all their dough AND their shoes!

 

Sometimes the blind can see better than you…

and one head may indeed be much.. much better than two !

 

© 2007 bythewurd J Hampton

 

 

 ("Don't be ignorant of satans devices " ~ 2nd Corinthians 2:11 )

 

Blesssssssss

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

" One Taken"....One Left " ....( and I'm not talking about SHOES )
Don't PLAY ...

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

I'd love to get my sticky little hands into this! Brilliant Jen! Great message offered in a humorous way...
There is so much rhyme that it would work better and flow easier if it were done in poetic form. I would normally never suggest butchering a piece of narrative, but this is screaming out to be loved!
The names are fantastic A Scottish Muslim and I loved the spin on Bo Diddley...Jen pleeeeeeze get some order into this with separate stanzas...do it for me xxx

[Lyonezz On Point]

I love this piece...
"The youngster said," no need, I know all about you!" I've come with a solution, I see just what to do!"
A perfect example of what ultimately happens when one is not paying attention to what others are saying to them.... and then the alternate message of letting someone else do what one knows they should be doing regardless of minor inconveniences....

Wonderful rhythm, fun rhyme a piece I would read to my parents and my grandchildren...

Loved the modern day aesop's fabletouch/feel.

Bible verse cream on top!

I just love your style Jen
Lioness....

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

what a great fun story to read... very enjoyable

[Otto L.n. Pipgras]

very impressive paralleling of modern world affairs. The rhythmic format really makes for a fun and challenging read that lets the readers mind snap in the breeze like a crisp laundered sheet on the clothesline. You can really see the time and effort put into this one. Very excellent piece. thanks much for sharing

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Very fun read - great rhythm...Quite creative. Thank you for sharing. Well done.
Light,
Siddartha

[Taj Sonchai]

Hello J. Hampton~

I'm fine, how are you? I enjoyed your little satire about the new shoes and goo. Written creatively fine with such rhythm and rhyme. I was hoping that maybe we could have a chat at sometime. This is what's new I really like what you do, so in turn I've decided to write this review. Keep up the good work and write all that you can because today J. Hampton you have gained a new fan.
My time is at an end, I'll request to be your friend and look forward to the time we correspond again.
I'll end with thanks for your gift of writing for now.
From me to you......

Taj Sonchai a.k.a. "The Black Mau"

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is a wonderful piece and I kept wondering where you where going with this I began to notice how easily they where both easily conned by the blind boy out of their money and shoes. I love the message at the end. This is what I enjoy so much about your writing. I'm rarely disappointed, certainly not in this one.
It was delivered in a fun light hearted way. Wonderful read.
Debby

[Richard McLin]

Very enjoyable, all I can tell you was that this piece was a delight. Nicely done.

Richard

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Your satirical composition holds up to censure, by means of ridicule, derision, burlesque, irony, misguided ideology and successfully criticizes the main characters in a witty manner.

The essential point, however, is that "in satire, irony is militant. The "militant irony" in your words (if the moral of the story is understood) will hopefully approve values that are the diametric opposite of what your two protagonists were actively engaged in - self-centredness.

A really enjoyable and poignant read. Fantastic!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Angelheaded Hipster]

Oh this is good....it bites and it holds on, and the message is clear.Now if they would have only thought to just leave the shoes behind....silly people....

[Genevieve]

This was such a fun read! :) A great message relayed in such a delightful way. I'd read this to my own son. Well done!