In Senryu Style

Poems of 5-7-5 syllables, and for the perfectionists, I shall call them poems, not senryu.

Soft, but for the heart

Kind, but for the painful years

Loved, but for the tears *** JE Falcon

Searching for lost love

A slight movement of a lid

Cat in the shoebox *** JE Falcon

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

I think you would call these Shi. Japanese form poetry written in English. Technically a Senryu should be about the foibles of man and be kind of humorous. I would say these fit that. Close enough. Except you lost a couple syllables in the middle of the first one. Fun to read!

[JE Falcon]

True, that is why I called these "In Senryu Style", STYLE, being the point. It seems that every third reference I check, the Haiku/Senryu rules are a little different. The last expert said that I didn't really need to have 17 syllables in an English Senryu(?) provided all the other rules were right. So, now I write what I feel is fun, and I call them other things, like poems, 5-7-5, etc. LOL. --- Poems are supposed to be fun, free, not full of rules. But the fact of the matter is, as soon as someone comes up with a new sort of poem, people come out of the woodwork just to add rules to writing them. :)

[William Michael Reeves]

I see you fixed that right quick. With the perfect word too. I hope you don't feel like I'm picking on you. Always worry 'bout that but feel like you want to know. And I know just what you mean about style and form. True waka is written in one line and English changes everything. I wanted to double check on what Cinquain was the other day and found out all kinds of stuff. True Cinquain is like a Tanka and the 2,4,6,8,2 thing we do is developed by an American writer. Makes the poets head spin!!

[M. J. Smith]

Ha! Nice twist at the end. Don't you just love cats? Seems they will make a bed anywhere.
Nice done, my high flying friend.

[JE Falcon]

Quiet and cozy places, it always seems.

[KAREN]

I love poems that are short but tell a story and these two poems do just that. The first one is sad and tells a story of maybe some hard times. The second one tells a more humorous story.

[JE Falcon]

Thanks, I'm happy you stopped by and took a peek. Cheers!

[KAREN]

You're welcome!

[Mike Keenan]

Human foibles indeed; nice work. Love the cat.

[JE Falcon]

Thanks. ...

[Kelly Scheppers]

Much enjoyed both. Perhaps, a little partial to the last, having three cats. Interestingly clever with its slight movement of the lid!

[JE Falcon]

Thanks, past memories.