My dear Loki

Are you my talisman, dear Loki, or

just a chimera that dominates my ether?

No nirvana for me, no celestial deity to divine

my path to righteousness.  To the extent that

I propagate and disseminate that which is dissembling,

puerile and pedantic antics bring the cosmos

only momentary levity.

A trifling amongst the solar giants,

your sublime japes sublimate

light and laughter, as I lament

the shenanigans that befall me and leave me

bereft of any beatific bliss. You sprinkle

mischief around you as you toy with

this monument to pathos.

 

 So! Behold the remains of your pranks

and hoaxes. I love to be with you yet

long to leave you.  I would cut the puppet

strings were there only strength to

redact my allegiance to you. Whenever I see

your face, it is not your face looking

back at me - it is mine.

Reviews

[Teri B]

My word! The double-edged quality of this piece is wonderful. I see the mischief and hear the muted anger, perhaps, or at the very least, frustration. How to respond to the pain, the confusion, the questions the speaker has about his situation...that is the thing to grapple with here. What he wishes he knew or even understood about his circumstances...what he wishes he DIDN'T know and understand.

I like it...can you tell? :)

[Black]

an excellent flow, with a nice imaginary and great wording
overall a top write

[Thea]

What a really great poem you have here...Excellent flow... :)))

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Talently done! Love the way you used the words create such perfect imagery!

[Rene Velez]

You have a way of making words dance, chosen carefully to bring great images.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice write, i love these parts:
"I love to be with you yet
long to leave you"

"Whenever I see
your face, it is not your face looking
back at me - it is mine."

...powerful n nice ending for a nice write.

[rose with love]

I can tell you have a great talent for words that immediately captivates the reader. amazing work!

[Poetic Beauty]

I simply love the outstanding way you ending this poem. Loki is one of my favorite gods to read about. I thought this would be a fun challenge and I like seeing how different people use the words differently. Your poem is more serious and describes different chaotic events in this poem. It is well thought out and written.

[Kenneth The Poet]

A fitting tribute to the angel of mischief...or death, if you know your movie trivia. I love this piece, the prose is almost dreamy like your in the eye of the hurricane.

[joshua deathdealer]

Outstanding write. Love the superb wordage and flow..xx

[Dreamer]

I love this line "I would cut the puppet strings were there only strength to redact my allegiance to you" I feel as if my life experience is summed up in that line. This is a great read Jeremy.