This Relationship

I said I'd never let anyone that close again
But I sat there nervously tapping the phone with my pen
Waiting for a call or text, I tried to push the feeling away
Not wanting to fall, not wanting this feeling to stay

 

Sitting there looking down, but he comes to say hi
Then walks away from my life, without a goodbye
He interacts enough to keep me hanging there
And watching him talk to another girl, is more than I can bear

 

Hating that I'm starting to be like this for him
I bet he doesn't even care, letting me stand on the rim
Trying To erase his face in my mind when I close my eyes
But thats all I end up seeing, I know this isn't wise

 

Just stepping in waiting to be crushed another time
But I can't stop it, it feels like a horrible crime
I'm decieving my heart and putting it out to be hurt
I'm sorry, I cant help it but im tripping and falling in the dirt

Reviews

[John Stussy]

Well, the heart follows its own whims, and sometimes gets us hurt for them. Keep your chin up, don't have the attitude you will never feel that ay again, rather that you'll just be wary of it next time. Who knows, your heart might lead you to a great guy next.

[bailish]

Don't we all fall for the same tricks again, even when we say we won't? We know better, but passion is not determined through logic. Our heart runs on a different set of rules.

This poem emphasizes the difference in those rule bases. Love it!

[shinybluestars03]

Great poem,
and im sure most of us can
relate to his aweful feeling.
Love is blind, but the good thing
is that we somehow learn to let
go of that person that made us do
the unthinkable.

Thanks for sharing

Best wishes

[Luis Gabriel]

oh wow...i understand i have easily been there and can sympathize and empathize...sometimes the people you love...just dont love you back and that hurts. Anyways the writing itself was good, good flow that ran smoothly...the only small critique i have is not tapping into the poem's full potential...next time dont be afraid to use a little word play and some strong imagery in there. All in all though, definately a good poem.

peace

-luis