Crushed Paris Streetscape

Deep down the sadness follows,
stiring up the crushed petals and tea stained
autumn leaves, they fall down on this scene;

It's crushed Paris streets and blazing fountains,
jewel dropped insanity and blooming celebrities
stepping forward to run before hitting the edge.
And it looks like all of Paris is cubed up,
crumpled up into a carboard box two by four,
with no way out save but marathons and mountains,
Like a spider running up a bath, there's no way out
of this box.

I used to love this scene.
Made me feel keys and codes and I thought I would grow.
Get older. Get wiser. Get her. Get it all.
I used to wander the crushed Paris streets, distorted black
factory shadows and paper-mache cafes, sidelined alleyways and
purring menances (the juttering MG B GT).
I used to wade in the tourist tapestries,
Murky realities all trampled under in the sodden Paris streets.
It's all under my feet now.

You saved me. I don't know how. I don't know why but
you came storming down into that cubed society and saved me
from the crushing of Paris streets, the landscape of souls
is scarred on the ground but you said all I had to do was
come with you, or you'll carry me, either way I know,
I see that day, watching from the south coast mountains,
that Paris is crushed, but I'm no way near it. 

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Stunning write. I, unfortunately, have not had the chance to visit there and this is not what I would expect to hear about the City of Love but you have done a wonderful job of describing a melancholic yet lovely scene where you are rescued so to speak in the end. Thank you for sharing your immense talent.
Light,
Siddartha

[poet2angels (lynda)]

Beautiful!
So touching are your words and how change has affected the place buty not your memories...beautifully written!

Lynda

[Katrina]

wow. you truly have an amazing descriptive style. i admire that a lot. it's hard to keep things so fresh when it seems like all the good adjectives have already been used. but you paint a picture for sure, and a pretty one at that.

xxx

[Damian Alan Gray]

Not bad, Jaffa. Not your best, but it's not bad. You know that I'm a big fan of your work, but this one left me wanting for more in the way of meter. I liked the imagery you presented, however, and you truly did make me feel as though I was once again walking through the streets of Paris.

[Hannah Erickson]

Tea-stained autumn leaves, paper-mache cafes, purring menaces, tourist tapestries, landscape of souls... I love it! I sense the same thing about Paris though I've never been there. Thanks for sharing.

[Vanessa]

This was absolutely breathtaking. I mean that in no exageration what-so-ever.
This was just stunning and so wonderful. I loved the wordingand the placement.
Everything was just too perfect!!

Feel free to send me read requests ANY TIME.
This was lovely : )

--Vanessa Alyse