A Poem by J.R Schlievert

just a poem i wrote a while back


In the middle of a peaceful summers day.
The wind colliding against my skin.
The sand cuddling my toes
And the enchanting blue obis hypnotizing me.
The song of the sea whistling in my ears.
The “ka!”ing of  gulls just adds to the euphony.
Up above,
The sun is encompassed by the blue ocean in the sky.
And all this is golden to me
Just as the eye in the sky.
The rippling waves,
Attracting and repelling by me feet.
Boats bobbing in the water.
A crab crashed up shore,
Poor thing.
No people to pollute this paradise.
Paradise is the word for this scene.
Pure paradise.
The bliss of being alive!

© 2009 J.R Schlievert

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You write of a wondeful place that is pure and magical in the sense that no one can pollute it with their intrusion on your euphoria. A place that only you can enter and feel the warmth of the sun. Place your feet in the water without fear of being stung by a jelly fish. Nothing that can harm you in anyway can enter. Only the things that make you feel alive and happy are allowed. The reader can feel the warmth of the sun, smell the salt in the air and hear the roar of the ocean. I would like to stay and visit a little longer on your private beach. A small stretch of beach know only to you within your minds eye. A beautiful poetic writing about what we can create that will bring us peace and contentment. You did well with this work.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Wow. This is like perfection-what you see in your dreams, and want. I love it.

Posted 11 Years Ago

I liked it! That would be a perfect paridise, and I wanted to stay longer. On mistake though. You said "repelling by me feet" instead of "repelling by my feet". But the peom itself was amazing. Keep on writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago

this is really good! i like it!

Posted 11 Years Ago

not my type of poems to read, but, it was WONDERFUL! the way you captured the view and scene and the atmosphere, reminds me of those days in my relative's house near the beach, such a wonderful poem, absolute favorite! :D


Posted 11 Years Ago

Love the detail truely puts the person on the beach to experience this day and peaceful and tranquil, very well done, JR! it:)

Posted 11 Years Ago

Wow... just wow! Beautiful imagery that you put into this! It was amazing! (And I'm not just saying that either! I really mean it!) The way that you described everything... it was almost as if you were actually there. That's how descriptive the poem was! :D

Posted 11 Years Ago

I like the great use of imagery here. It entangles all the senses to bring the scene alive. I jumped back to this poem cause I like to see the beginning of a writers work, you've got a good solid start here. I particularly like the "Attracting and repelling my feet" line. Just a note, idk if it was intentional but there's a possible mistyping with "Pour thing".

Posted 11 Years Ago

i absolutly love it! I can feel everything you describe and picture it in my mind! It's absolutly beautiful.

Posted 11 Years Ago

A very nice picture to be viewed, and this poem is perfectly worded. I loved this poem and the way the words curved around our thoughts. Great write and keep it up! ☺

Posted 11 Years Ago

You painted a lovely utopia with your words. The imagery brings your private paradise to life.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on August 20, 2009
Last Updated on September 4, 2009


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