Soul Savior

Of Self Love.

"Tell Me Something I Want To Hear.

 Show Me The Future You Escaped.

 Bring To Me A Vision Of Peace.

 Give Me The Hope I Strive For.

 Keep The Beat Of My Heart Near By.

 Keep My Illusion Of You Within Sight.

 Just Keep Me Moving Within This Wasteland. 

 I Can't Feel Anything Anymore.

 I Can Hear Your Haunting Words Whisper To Me.

 Don't Give Up You're Almost There.

 Reach For Me Reach Beyond This Dream.

 But Reach Past This Isolation.

 So Much Devastation Within You.

 I Can't Seem To Walk Right In.

 I Can't Use The Key To Your Lock.

 Your Deadlocked Heart.

 You Seem To Just Disappear.

 Every Time I Need You.

 Just Throw Me Away.

 Like You Always Do.

 Just Leave Me Here For Another Day.

 In And Out Of Salvation.

 Freezing Hope And Leaking Out Hope.

 Break A Promise Never Given. 

 If You Must Just Let Me Fade.

 So Now What I Have To Say.

 Well I Think I Have Been Betrayed.

 Cause I Know Your Just Like A Grenade. 

 But Somehow I Can Still See Your Tears Downpour.

 As Somehow I Can Still See You Alone At The Seashore.

 Still Somehow I Can Still See You And Your Demons At War.

 I Am Broken And Have Fallen But I'm Always Your Soul Savior."

 

Reviews

[Gaiamethod]

The first six stanzas were very 'connecting'. I could feel the despair of loss and betrayal very well. The last two stanzas, became a little weaker for me. Possibly because it felt like you were trying to find the words which rhymed but they didn't suit the energy of what you were saying any-more. You began the poem more from your psyche but it became more from your mind. The rhyming doesn't matter so much to me as you express the pain so well without it! It is such a good poem overall and I can certainly identify!!!

[LadyNaida]

I can't believe you only have 2 reviews.

[LadyNaida]

This is so beautiful...I can't even put in to words...wow.

[Bette]

this is good, just when i was thinking this would rock if you could put this to rhyme, i got to where you did. nice, well done! a few more comb throughs and i think you will have a masterpiece