Landmark

Child to adult the picture is ever changing

Another landmark;
One more step taken
Seconds added to the ride--
No longer in tandem--
Training wheels off,
I give one last push
knowing that my guiding hand
is no longer needed.

A change of duty
To occasional coach,
Giving warning
Of ruts and rocks ahead.
Our paths a divergent meandering,
Intersecting instead of coinciding,
On your chosen course.

Fly along the winds
Toward your passion
Don't look back.
Don't slow down.
I'll be right where I've always been--
Watching over--
Cheering you on
to the next landmark.

05/03/2013

Author's Note

Yes this is another Mom write, and probably my most recent one so a slightly different style than the others. Perhaps a new on is in the offing soon or I wouldn't be looking at them so often.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful photo and hopeful words. Thank you for sharing the positive poetry dear Poet.
Coyote

[JayceeC]

Thanks for reading and commenting.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Matt Jenner]

Just a lovely poem. Enough to be said.

[JayceeC]

Thanks for stopping by Matt

[E G TEN]

Wow.. if I was a chick I would be crying for this read,, very touching, but since I'm a dude I just manage to tear up a little. Great Job always in both sides,, Thanks for Sharing! :-) I've got like 89 more requests.. been busy the whole week :/

[JayceeC]

Never feel obligated to come and read when your slammed. Just come by when you can. I totally understand being busy. ;-/

[JayceeC]

PS-- sorry about the tears...

[wordman]

a very pretty grl,and a great write,letting her know that mom is always here
letting go is hard to do

[JayceeC]

We were very blessed that God brought her to us. All of my children are special, but this is my child that is all heart and does for others before considering herself.

[wordman]

so you did, a great job as a mom,happy mothers day

[JayceeC]

Thanks Wordman!

[wordman]

you are welcome

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Brilliant!!!
full of love and motivation........
she must have loved it!!! i did!!
such personal and beautiful expression..........achievements through children are special...........and best!!!
:)

[JayceeC]

Thanks P! You always say the nicest things about my work! Its a real ego booster ;-)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

well there is some purpose to my existence.......!!!! :D
always a pleasure..... :) :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I feel your teary-eyed sadness and I feel your joyful pride. Because children grow up so fast and before you know it, they have children of their own, and they don't live with you anymore and you don't hear from them every day. But it is our duty as mothers to give birth, nurture our children, teach them valuable lessons that will be their reference points to guide them in life, and to set them free when they are mature enough. I have yet to have children of my own, but I felt this deeply with every cell in my body.

[JayceeC]

As much as I agree with you about raising children, nothing quite prepares you for this landmark, or even worse was leaving her at college 11 hours away. There is just an abruptness in the change that is hard to get past. I'm still proud of all she has accomplished since leaving home. She's a very independent lady.

[Perkele.7885]

JayCee, just be proud. She is just down the road. I lost one many years ago for all time at the tender age of three. Just be proud of tour children. She is your accomplishment.

[RiverRei]

My sister is just as beautiful as you are, Momma! I'm learning these things as well, being a "step mother" (in quotes because we aren't married so I'm not officially their step mother yet, we just all say that I am) has taught me a lot about teaching, raising, and learning to let them make their own mistakes. I can't quite relate because I didn't raise them from birth and the oldest is only 13, but I'm getting there. Thanks for sharing this with me Momma! LOVE YOUUUU!!!!!

[JayceeC]

River, You will do well with your brood. You have a big heart and that's really the most important thing. Lots of Love, Momma J

[Willard Wells]

There are many elements to this from graduating and moving on and your teaching and mentoring, but then there is the, you can reach your goals and I am here to help. Very nice work that shows your compassion and enthusiasm to show the path to success, but it is time for you to step back.

I see the element of leaving the nest and taking flight the first time and the challenges. Nice work and thank you for sharing.

[JayceeC]

Well even when they leave the nest, your still a parent. I can't change my mother hen too much..but I also believe if your children are independent and willing to work for their dreams...whatever they are..the parenting was successful.

[CD Campbell]

Excellent write. I enjoy a lot of the varied work you put out. So ok, this is a "mom" poem. So what? It is relevant to who you are. I like the ending an beginning with the title. I wouldn't change it. CD

[JayceeC]

Thanks CD. This one has actually already been edited to the extent I will ever edit. And Yes, a Mom is a large part of who I am. I just like to identify which personality showed up in my schizophrenia...LOL

[CD Campbell]

*long sigh*

[JayceeC]

Your the one that said we were all a little schizophrenic..LOL

[Taylor]

Jan, I love your "mom" poems. This one as your others is so wise. My favorite line is "I give one last push". Such landmarks can indeed be re-births, both for the child who takes flight into a new phase and the mother who stands watching in amazement. I also like the line "our paths a divergent meandering." I hesitate to write the following bec I know zilch about poetry, but I wonder if the poem would be stronger if the images were consistent OR show more clearly a progression. So, what I mean is: images that move from crawling to walking to running to driving(?) to flying OR if you choose one such as flying and maintain it. Now since I'm not a poet and you are, please feel free to label all of that as an idea destined for the trash bin. By the way, congratulations. Every graduation is a great achievement for parents as well as grads. Taylor

[JayceeC]

Taylor, thank you for the kind review. I see what you're saying about the images, but best I remember this was prompted buy a picture of a mom with a child learning to ride a bike and that is kind of the theme that I start to. so if you go back and reread think of it as teaching your child to ride a bike training wheels off

[Taylor]

Yes, I see it now. Duh! That's why my poetry reviews aren't worth the paper they're written on! Lol

[JayceeC]

Lol..well the time and though is appreciated. I write quite a few for my kids, especially this daughter who is so big-hearted and since I give them to her, I try to change them up a bit or it would be same song another verse. However, I do like that you tell me what you like about them. That is helpful in itself, so don't bash yourself.

[Taylor]

Your daughter will treasure these. I kept a diary for my daughter, unbeknownst to her,from the time I was pregnant with her until she was pregnant with her daughter and then gave it to her. It was almost a daily account and though I wish the writing were better, it still contains stories about all the tiny milestones that we've all forgotten and I think she views it as a real treasure. I am doing the same for my three-year-old granddaughter. Nothing like these girls as they grow into fine women.