Weathered

Weathered

A Poem by JayceeC
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Tritetra poem

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Feelings grew shaped as weather;
born in heady atmosphere
of youthful spring, a wond'rous fling
filling my heart with delight.

Glorious cloud of cirrus
sweeping across life's skies,
fair-weathered wind, warm zephyrs send
rapture-blown heat through our nights.

Yet clouds are wont to gather
accumulate-- drifting low.
A certain squall, a total stall,
drenching torrent of goodbyes.

Seasons perpetual change
altered all dynamic climes
in temperate thought, a rainbow's sought
Spring's tears in summer are dried.

© 2016 JayceeC


Author's Note

JayceeC
Word Bank Contest:  cirrus. atmosphere. shape. wind, blown, total
Form: Tritetra
At least three quatrains of 7-7-8-7

where the third line is Iambic Tetrameter with six words (two three-word phrases) that rhyme at the fourth and eighth  syllable.
Other lines need not rhyme.

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A warm feeling came while reading this, I felt like standing on a hill smelling the Jasmine and feeling the soft breeze. Thank you for this marvelous piece.

Posted 4 Years Ago


JayceeC

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. Glad that it instigated those peaceful thoughts
You may not be able to affect my political bent, but you sure all swaying me regarding poetry. This piece as with so many other poems of yours speaks a tome beyond its lyrical brevity. Sends a mind spinning. You're so wise to be so young.

Posted 4 Years Ago


JayceeC

4 Years Ago

Ha Ha Ha...I may work on your political view for the next election. It's good to see that you have .. read more
I really enjoy the variations in your writing and last lines were mind blowing...awesome!

Posted 4 Years Ago


JayceeC

4 Years Ago

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
A. Amos

4 Years Ago

You're most welcome my friend and I truly did.
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JC
damn this is good, made me think of angelic springs, scent of winds and love and of change. Beautifully done.

Posted 4 Years Ago


JayceeC

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reading my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Good to see you around JC. I haven't b.. read more
wow! how delightful! it takes some real dedication to bring something like that off ... nice job ... going to read again .. to re-enforce the summer warmth on my cheeks ..nice work ma'am!
E.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

yes ..this upper midwest before Spring is so grey and gloomy .. tho temps have risen to the 30's the.. read more
JayceeC

4 Years Ago

I wish I could send some of my 70's and 80's weather to you...If we could just spit the difference. .. read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

yes indeed ..the graceful art of compromise ... but i am a sinner and doomed to suffer :}
Very impressed with this Jaycee. Done for a WC contest? It flows very well and is almost Shakespearian at times - almost thinking 'if it were done when 'tis done, then t'were well ....' I have absolutely no idea about pentameters or tetrameters but at the same time my mind recognised a structure sort of subconsciously whilst reading. I can just about 'get' haikus and have dabbled with those. I quite like the discipline of structure as it forces the writer to think very carefully about what they want to say and how to express it. Nicely done!
Regards
Nigel

Posted 4 Years Ago


JayceeC

4 Years Ago

LOL I was having this discussion on group message board this morning: bar, afar, spa We use a hard.. read more
Nigel Newman

4 Years Ago

And of course, we're inconsistent, which really helps folk trying to learn English. 'ought' is the c.. read more
JayceeC

4 Years Ago

Yes a very poor French accent there. You would think their nannies or at least their father could ha.. read more
This was "fun" - some challenges ARE challenges.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Chris

4 Years Ago

I did "such" thing long, long ago - til I got over it. Did keep a few "examples" though to remind .. read more
JayceeC

4 Years Ago

It keeps me writing on days I could just sit and stare at a blank screen because I don't feel much l.. read more
Chris

4 Years Ago

We DO need our insanities - don't we...
well you nailed it,and made it sound great !

Posted 4 Years Ago


JayceeC

4 Years Ago

Thanks Ron!
Interesting form. Good luck in the contest!

Posted 4 Years Ago


JayceeC

4 Years Ago

Hi Matt. Thanks your reading and the wishes
Beautifully captured JayceeC. Yeah, call me old fashioned, but this one jumped off the page when I saw the title (we take our weather very seriously here), then on reading (you described my life, especially the penultimate verse, then wonder....Wondering why I never paid more attention at school, as your notes of what it is leave me with question mark eyebrows and an urge to put my hand up and say "Please Miss.....Huh?" :)
I really don't know anything at all about poetry other than what I like and this is wonderful. Good luck in the contest. I'm pretty sure you're in with a very good chance of winning it :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


alifeacoustic

4 Years Ago

I do get bamboozled easily I'm afraid, but it still takes nothing away from the work itself, which w.. read more
JayceeC

4 Years Ago

Thanks Alfie. Can't believe we weren't friends already. We bump into each other quite a bit.
alifeacoustic

4 Years Ago

I know. I don't understand either as I was subscribed to your writing, which doesn't work because it.. read more

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Added on February 22, 2016
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