Can You Keep A Secret ?????

A secret recipe to wealth!

Can You Keep A Secret.



The Modus Operandi of the Alchemists of Old.

Is a secret I will tell you, SWEAR IN BLOOD it won't be told!

The way to riches you will master, I will take you on the path.

Turning lead into gold, you will be master of the craft.

O heed to me, my apprentice I will tell you only once!

The Universal method, the arcane way, to wealth enhanced

The seven wandering stars, that are naked to the eye.

The different stages of the metal, the varied colours of the dye.


Saturn's heavy lead, to Mercury, Quicksilver you become.

Tin's metamorphosis miracle, from God Jupiter's heart plum.

Trusty Iron, loves vision Venus, red copper to the core.

Shining silver moon, with weighty gravity you war.

The five elements congeal, the Zodiacal process of the Sun's.

The Philosophers Stone lies before you, the secrets almost won!


The Unicorns pure crimson blood, transmuted in Phoenix flame.

Mixed with a Ravens claw and a flowing noble lions mane.

More colours than a peacocks feather, burst into clear blue sky.

The mixture is quite potent now, let not the cauldron fires die.

Now plunge your heart into the brew, if ever you be so bold.

Wait for the kiss of Fortuna's Luck, Gold!.....Gold!!.....GOLD!!!

Author's Note

I leave my esteemed reviewers to interpret this one :)

Reviews

[Becca Bishop]

Very very very very very very very very very very VERY amazing!!!! Valde prodigious!!!! Muy impresionante!!! 很惊人!!!! Zeer verbazingwekkend!!!! Très étonnant!!!!! An-iontach!!!!! Ajabu Sana!!!! rhyfeddol iawn!!!!

Man, I hope I didn't just cuss in a foreign language. That'd be super duper embarrassing :P

I just couldn't find a way to say how very very amazing this is using only English!! And it's all your fault. Shame on you for being such a spectacular writer that I'm left wordless for a few moments after I read one of your poems. Eternal shame.....

I really really love how you described all the different metals in the second stanza. It was beautiful in a metallic way; it all fit together flawlessly. And then in the last part where you actually gave the recipe ...awesome. I'm so jealous of how easily you're able to rhyme! It's not fair! Grrrrrr >:( I honestly feel like throwing a gigantic muffin at you right now, that's how angry I am. Sadly, my shrink says I've gotta start keeping my anger in check and blah blah blah....

ANYWAYS!!!!!

Way to go on this one! You always write such incredible things that I've never really given much thought to and then I read your poems and I'm like "Holy cow!!!! This is so interesting!!! Why haven't I heard more about this??!!! Why isn't there a whole class being taught just on this subject??!!! Why do I only have ten toes???? What's wrong with our scholastic system these days!!!????"

By the way, I completely agree with lothlorienwriter....QUITE BEING SO ANNOYINGLY GREAT AT WRITING!!!!! Do the impossible for once and write something so horrible that everyone dies...and do it fast because I've got a Chemistry test on Thursday that I'd rather not take.

Meanwhile, I'll be in my kitchen, baking a giant muffin. Mwahahahah ;)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I accept the horrible poem challenge......your have it before thursday.

[Becca Bishop]

YAYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm gonna hold you to that :P

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/JohnHutchinson/1059867/

[Bewitching Sensations]

As always..a fantastic poem x

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Good to see you back on here x!

[Bewitching Sensations]

aww thanks john x

[Enid Blake]

I love all the elements of fantasy that you weave into this recipe, or shall I say quest? Of course, money is the route of all evil, is it not? The moment you make 'material' riches your motivation, you're in trouble (in my humble opinion, obviously)
I completely enjoyed immersing in this :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Quest indeed :)

[Nicky Sarti]

I love this, and I can keep a secret; so you can totally tell me your thoughts behind this one.
The picture is pretty too.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

The poem is based on the picture.....dont tell anyone...secret yeah:)

[Nicky Sarti]

Ohhhh... I won't tell anyone x

[Mauricio Montoya]

Nice work.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Golden comment ;)

[Mauricio Montoya]

what more can I say from what I've read so far, you're a good writer and that's Golden.

[Violet Dreams...]

Forgotten arts of old, magically penned.:P
Secret worth keeping, and indeed a secret worth hearing

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Shhhh dont tell everyone :)

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Oh god ! How do you manage to write such mistical poems? Awe-inspiring work !

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Sshhh Keep it a secret....remember.

[quinfinn]

this is brilliant and cleverly penned. i have always thought alchemy to be a metaphor but you have stung the senses and enlightened the poet within my soul with this fantasy of ritualistic lore. makes me want to practice some forgotten arts of old.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Practice away but keep it a Secret......dont tell anyone! ;)

[PublishingAgent]

I see Mark is picking on your talent again! You are building up quite the esoterical portfolio of work John and this is more than worthy of being in there.

I always wonder where your next poem is going to take us, its always a breath taking unique journey with you. I mean unique as well you have something very different about you perhaps Mark is right you are an Alchemist. Stay in touch X.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thanks Em, I will do of course :) x