Can You Keep A Secret ?????

A secret recipe to wealth!

Can You Keep A Secret.



The Modus Operandi of the Alchemists of Old.

Is a secret I will tell you, SWEAR IN BLOOD it won't be told!

The way to riches you will master, I will take you on the path.

Turning lead into gold, you will be master of the craft.

O heed to me, my apprentice I will tell you only once!

The Universal method, the arcane way, to wealth enhanced

The seven wandering stars, that are naked to the eye.

The different stages of the metal, the varied colours of the dye.


Saturn's heavy lead, to Mercury, Quicksilver you become.

Tin's metamorphosis miracle, from God Jupiter's heart plum.

Trusty Iron, loves vision Venus, red copper to the core.

Shining silver moon, with weighty gravity you war.

The five elements congeal, the Zodiacal process of the Sun's.

The Philosophers Stone lies before you, the secrets almost won!


The Unicorns pure crimson blood, transmuted in Phoenix flame.

Mixed with a Ravens claw and a flowing noble lions mane.

More colours than a peacocks feather, burst into clear blue sky.

The mixture is quite potent now, let not the cauldron fires die.

Now plunge your heart into the brew, if ever you be so bold.

Wait for the kiss of Fortuna's Luck, Gold!.....Gold!!.....GOLD!!!

Author's Note

I leave my esteemed reviewers to interpret this one :)

Reviews

[Becca Bishop]

Very very very very very very very very very very VERY amazing!!!! Valde prodigious!!!! Muy impresionante!!! 很惊人!!!! Zeer verbazingwekkend!!!! Très étonnant!!!!! An-iontach!!!!! Ajabu Sana!!!! rhyfeddol iawn!!!!

Man, I hope I didn't just cuss in a foreign language. That'd be super duper embarrassing :P

I just couldn't find a way to say how very very amazing this is using only English!! And it's all your fault. Shame on you for being such a spectacular writer that I'm left wordless for a few moments after I read one of your poems. Eternal shame.....

I really really love how you described all the different metals in the second stanza. It was beautiful in a metallic way; it all fit together flawlessly. And then in the last part where you actually gave the recipe ...awesome. I'm so jealous of how easily you're able to rhyme! It's not fair! Grrrrrr >:( I honestly feel like throwing a gigantic muffin at you right now, that's how angry I am. Sadly, my shrink says I've gotta start keeping my anger in check and blah blah blah....

ANYWAYS!!!!!

Way to go on this one! You always write such incredible things that I've never really given much thought to and then I read your poems and I'm like "Holy cow!!!! This is so interesting!!! Why haven't I heard more about this??!!! Why isn't there a whole class being taught just on this subject??!!! Why do I only have ten toes???? What's wrong with our scholastic system these days!!!????"

By the way, I completely agree with lothlorienwriter....QUITE BEING SO ANNOYINGLY GREAT AT WRITING!!!!! Do the impossible for once and write something so horrible that everyone dies...and do it fast because I've got a Chemistry test on Thursday that I'd rather not take.

Meanwhile, I'll be in my kitchen, baking a giant muffin. Mwahahahah ;)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I accept the horrible poem challenge......your have it before thursday.

[Becca Bishop]

YAYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm gonna hold you to that :P

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/JohnHutchinson/1059867/

[Cathy Wattam]

I do love a good mystical poem. Nice rhyming too. Off to find that Unicorn now....

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

You do love a good mystical poem........well you came to the right profile then my portfolio is full of magical mystical metaphysical pieces ;)

[Barbara Walker]

A rare subject! Rhymes and rhythm are great. I am not bold enough to try the recipe to see if it works!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Keep it secret if you do ;)

[Kaylor Mason]

This is so cool! The more and more I read, the more I got pulled in. That's a neat idea, too--using the stars and planets as the stages of metals and all. I wonder if alchemists ever will find a way to transmute lead to gold . . . if they ever did, the value of gold would dive faster than a 747 with the wings ripped off

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Alchemists used planetary symbols to denote the different stages its very interesting google it :)

[Ahmad Cox]

Wow. I love this one. There is an otherwordly and mystical quality to this one

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Shhh remember to keep it a secret.....tell no one :)

[Mary]

I love the business of alchemy... so many of our esteemed scientists were alchemists, (and probably still are) and had their secret laboratories and books written in code. Matter of fact, it's been rumored that Isaac Newton's recipe comes close to producing a gold-like substance . (a lot of research going on to translate his secret notes.) But I digress. This is such a fun fantasy, and I love the ending... is there some kind of hidden lesson? hmmmm.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Its a hermetical lesson like a lot of my poems are......we possess gold in great quantities....all of us.

[Mary]

so very very true, friend

[Claire Twinn]

Thanks John, got all the other ingredients, just off to the zoo for the lion's mane and the drinks are on me! Looking forward to those colours bursting into the sky.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Dont get mauled.....as I fancy that drink ;)

[deepblue04]

I really like the second line, it made me laugh just reading it

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Listen I will tell you only once......keep this poem a secret!!

[deepblue04]

XD

[Stanley Wilson]

as always brilliant work enjoyed it by the way the answer is 42!! hahaha good work takes you on a geat journey.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

So long and thanks for all the fish!

[Stanley Wilson]

:)

[Muse]

ha ha ha...I studied this a few months back...wrote one myself titled the Philosopher's Stone. It would be easy to get lost and wrapped up in your metaphors....but because I'm familiar with it already; the message is so simple. We all seek this magic...the sweet elixir of life. The art of alchemy may be forgotten..but it is not lost. Thank you for breathing new life into it...I loved it.