Sam Stabbed Mother

Sam Stabbed Mother

A Poem by José Humilde
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Having some fun with a quatrain. Enjoy!

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In came Sam, soaked in blood red;
sat at the table to wait.
"Sister Mary, mother's dead."
Dinner tonight will be late...

© 2010 José Humilde


Author's Note

José Humilde
WELL, I got it back down to seven syllables on each line. This is what I originally had. I'm just not as happy with it.

I have no idea what is with me lately, been kind of in a "bloody" mood, I guess. Enjoy this bizarreness! :)

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It seems every writer goes through little phases. I can't seem to get out of a gay rights one... lol.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Love the irony and black humor in this little tale. Well done!

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Posted 10 Years Ago


i think you should've mastered the seven syllables with a smoothe flow, and the term "blood red" lost it for me because its such an overused expression.
the rhyming is still choppy. but the title is Excellent! and humorous in context.but
the unfortunately the poem isn't as good. let me knowmif you revise this

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Posted 10 Years Ago


wish i could see Sister Mary's reaction :D

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Posted 10 Years Ago


LOL. Funny last line. Nice little write, the title definitely drew me in.

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Posted 10 Years Ago


I know it sounds twisted but I thought this poem was Hilarius at first I thought it was a hiko but it was 7 7 but it was still a great write

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Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on May 27, 2010
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Tags: morbid, killing, blood, bizarre, dead, quatrain poetry, quatrain
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José Humilde
José Humilde

Pocatello, ID



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I'm a simple man with a complex mind. I was born and raised in southeastern Idaho, and wouldn't change a thing. I'm a young 21-year-old Chicano who has a deep understanding for his culture. I'm.. more..

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