Blue Dawn

~ a romantic poem written in lai form ~

 

     richard johnson art

 

 

~~~

Quiet is the night

weaving pale moonlight

the hue

soft and oh so slight

sets my dreams in flight

of you

hold me ‘til dawn’s light

takes you from my sight

in blue

 

 

When the falling dew

sweeps the day anew

I’ll don

a dress of bright hue

a smile though not true

and on

a vision of you

I’ll find my way through

Blue Dawn

~~~

Author's Note

The Lai is a French form of poetry - each nine line verse consists of five syllable couplets seperated by a two syllable line with a rhyme pattern of a/a/b/a/a/b/a/a/b.

Reviews

[Trace]

See.. there you go again.
Being the consummate poet.
If this wasn't so dam good
I would say you were showing off....

But it is just too dam good.
You are amazing.
And this poem shows it in every line.
Crystal Blue perfection.

Huggs. Trace

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it Trace. Your comments always make my day... :) Julie

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Wow. This is really nice. As usual. Your affinity for beautiful words is breathtaking. And I must say that the picture going nicely with this piece. Like always. And the scene you've painted is oh so beautiful. Nicely done. Stay inspired.

[MsJewel]

Thank you Kristan :) Julie

[Outcast]

I'm enamored by the way diction truly makes or breaks a piece.
The poem is truly an experience, thank you for posting.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Dara]

This is simply beautiful Julie and the French form fits wonderfully with your extraordinary flair for romance . Your words paint a portrait equal to the image you have included. Really loved this one!

[MsJewel]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it Dara. Thanks so much :) Julie

[Cat]

Very nice scene you have created! A light and soft poem.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[Cherry Pepperweb]

This is beautiful Julie but something about the line 'a smile though not true' feels sad.

[MsJewel]

Sad to see someone go....
Your lovely comments always leave me with a smile :) Julie

[Valentine]

No matter the style, the romantic side of you pops through. Nice write. Valentine

[MsJewel]

Thank you Kathie :) Julie

[AaronFreitas]

Beautiful write Julie... you are definitely amazing with romantic writes. I love the rhyming in this poem :)

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Aaron. It's always lovely to see you! :) julie

[Jamestown]

Always so beautifully written:)
I always enjoy your wonderful poetry,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[MsJewel]

Thank you dear James! :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful words and places you took me dear Julie.
"When the falling dew
sweeps the day anew
I’ll don
a dress of bright hue
a smile though not true
and on
a vision of you
I’ll find my way through"
The above lines can stand alone. I like the visions brought to life by the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Julie.