Invisible Threads

Invisible Threads

A Poem by MsJewel
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~ a romantic poem written in zejel form ~

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Art ~ Arthur Braginsky



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My love is his, his love is mine

two hearts that beat and intertwine

in a love found to be divine

 

Invisible the binds that tie

our hearts as one, and yet I fly

carefree and light, as in the sky

tethered to him but not confined

 

Like butterflies are to a rose

the nectar’s sweet, and I suppose

a tiny taste and my heart knows

my lips have sipped the finest wine

 

So warming is this sweet embrace

as if the sun has left a trace

of sunbeams tied and softly laced

around our hearts, as they align

 

Through misty dawns and moonlit nights

together we have found delight

threaded as one, gently, yet tight

My love is his, his love is mine

~~~

 




 

© 2016 MsJewel


Author's Note

MsJewel
The Zejel: The first stanza, known as the mudanza, has three lines, rhyming aaa. All the other stanzas - as many of them as you like - have 4 lines, rhyming bbba, the a rhyme harking back to the first stanza. So the overall rhyming scheme for the poem is aaa/bbba/ccca/ddda/... with 8 or 9 syllables per line but this is not required

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Incredible... You have a mastery of breath and rhyme control that puts most to shame... Your syllable usage, and the way each line magically ties up at the end, as if by some gigantic invisible hand... Stunning... To say the least... Not to mention the divine word choice, and heart wrenching landscape of emotion made... Perfectly penned...

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind and generous words :) Julie
DylanChase

4 Years Ago

You are welcome...



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Incredible... You have a mastery of breath and rhyme control that puts most to shame... Your syllable usage, and the way each line magically ties up at the end, as if by some gigantic invisible hand... Stunning... To say the least... Not to mention the divine word choice, and heart wrenching landscape of emotion made... Perfectly penned...

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind and generous words :) Julie
DylanChase

4 Years Ago

You are welcome...
Beautiful poetry entwined with balanced rhyming. Your imagery is always soft and delicate. I enjoy reading your poems and admire your unique style. You have your voice in your writings, you are an artist with words.
Blessings,
Richie b.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

4 Years Ago

Richie, You are very kind. Thank you :) Julie
Don't understand a thing about stanzas but get the pattern. I have used it a few times myself. Don't you find when writing poetry that the poem dictates the pattern? This poem of yours is a gem as its subject matter marries in with this style so well. For a poet I am not great with words...I enjoyed it is what I am trying to say, you still GOT it...I have been away a while now and it was good to find your poetry again Julie

Posted 4 Years Ago


Might try this sometime. Thanks for the lesson Julie. Now, the poem is pretty splendid and the subject and form come together well with the guidance of your fine nib.

Posted 4 Years Ago


MsJewel

4 Years Ago

Thank you John :) Julie
Very good. I didnt read the author's note until after. as i was reading i did feel a nice clever rhyming scheme. The poem itself was very universal, it was sweet.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

4 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you :) Julie
Love your poetry Julie w/Lots of love for sure it's in the lines so pure. Jim Smith

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

4 Years Ago

Thank you Jim :) Julie
Your writing is tight and disciplined but it's not cheesy or too cliché.

Every time it's like this or better. You're a very sound writer.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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After reading all, then reading the reviews, I have come to the conclusion that, although a raving beauty you are
and an obvious talent----
Poetry is not my thing.
What is my thing ?
You must read me more
and so what you feel.
Thank you.
---- Eagle Cruagh

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

4 Years Ago

Thank you :) Julie
Just gloriously romantic, Julie! You aced the form and the lines flow so melodically! Wonderful work. Lydi**

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

4 Years Ago

Thank you Lydi. Happy New Year my friend :) Julie
Oh, wow. I'm glad I stopped here today. There is so much to love about this poem, most of all I love what it says and the message it's sending out.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

4 Years Ago

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thanks so much James :) Julie

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MsJewel

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