Bang, Bang

Bang, Bang

A Poem by MsJewel
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Just another love poem

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The air is crisp this evening, chillier than usual this time of year

whispering through the clouds, as if there is a secret

I choose not to hear

Raising goosebumps on ivory skin

Freeing my hair

Yet, I am imprisoned

                            trapped in obscure memories

 

How I’d love to go back in history

solve the mystery

Perhaps not play so loose with the hand I was dealt

Ah… but his only purpose was to save me from another carbon copy scene

to hold me undivided

The artist, the poet, the insatiable lover

        The man

who saw soft curves,

                                manicured nails

                                                and social graces…

                           a delicate flower

 Ignoring the casualty of men and their lecherous eyes

whose terrible lies

                I wear like a disguise

                                                 my armor

 

 Refusing to see the dandelion with a pearl handled pistol

 

Reversing the roles, those wolves now slayed…

Was he just a sacrificial lamb to cleanse my dark soul

or did I truly love and lose?

 

And now, I follow behind picking up the pieces of my reality

confined, confused, and wondering wherever he is…

 

Is the wind catching his hair

setting him free?

 

           Bang, bang


© 2018 MsJewel


Author's Note

MsJewel
photograph courtesy of pinterest
poetry by MsJewel

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also, very awesome. i love the 357 magnum, it's a real jumper. curious though, i can't be sure myself without looking it up really but is slayed not meant to be slain? again, i'm just reading, and if need be, proofreading, and so far I love it, my lady.
I will dive into your back-catalog now.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

1 Year Ago

Thanks again Wes :) Julie



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Ooooo a bit spooky. Not your usual style but I love it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Romance noir. Now this is a concept I like.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Julie Dear,
Once again you leave my atmosphere (and senses) alive with the imagery of emotional captivity only a skilled, knowing poetess' pen possesses.
How very true, Julie … one can take only so much insensitive maltreatment before even the purest, most willing to forgive amongst us is worn away to the point of striking back in retaliation/reclamation of pride, identity, and self-respect.
A bit south of your more tender stream, I've read this so many times its essence is pigmented into my fiber, but its worth it to know you better, to enjoy a touch from your more vulnerable, perhaps, protective nature.
Papyrus, a splendid font choice, befitting the moment's ambiance, and that photo … tastefully oo-lala! ; )

Brilliant, as always, I love it … thank you, Julie✨ ⁓ Richard : )

Bang, bang!

Posted 1 Year Ago


The perils of love can truly be consequential in terms of the eye of the beholder. Your stunning and erotic photo adds an invaluable sensuality to a woman whose been swept of her feet, lost her lover unwillingly, and now she's playing for keeps if she can only recapture the essence of not only himself but what they both once had as a couple. That was my interpretation of your engaging poem. Excellent work Julie. An intriguing write an ingenious read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Julie,
Your writing shows a sharper edge in this poem. You mastered the hard line showing this young lady is no push over. Your unique talent is diverse and allows you to reveal the vast emotions of love and relationships. Well done.
Richie b.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Loved the photo you attached. It matched your piece so well. Your words are so soft yet carried that hard edge it needed to take this to the next level!

Wonderful writing as always Julie!

Posted 1 Year Ago


also, very awesome. i love the 357 magnum, it's a real jumper. curious though, i can't be sure myself without looking it up really but is slayed not meant to be slain? again, i'm just reading, and if need be, proofreading, and so far I love it, my lady.
I will dive into your back-catalog now.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

1 Year Ago

Thanks again Wes :) Julie
We all came to life without a operational handbook we do the best we can with the cards we are played love and loss are just part of life I guess

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Thank you Tate :) Julie
More than the actual story being told, I'm mesmerized by the way your language & word-crafting feels so artful, yet menacing. I loved reading each surprising line that took me deeper into the mystery. I really love the first half of the second stanza -- brilliant imagery & analysis. I'm not even sure about the ending, but I can see it as a killing, not particularly of flesh, but of the incessant thoughts & memories or other lingering assaults in the aftermath of a bad coupling! (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Thanks so much for your kind words :) Julie
What a photograph! How could I not read this one. And, the writing is better than the image. Your words paint a vivid image and speak in whispers, yet the reader realizes this is a strong woman. The "Bang, Bang" at the end is a playful, but chilling reminder the woman is serious. More than impressive. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Thank you Robert. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. :) Julie

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I've been writing poetry for 15 years. My poetry isn't unique in any way, but it is written from the heart. I have trouble keeping up with everyone's poetry, so please send me rr's. I enjoy rec.. more..

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