Wait for It

I suffer from a sleeping disorder and at night I can get extremely anxious over the smallest thing. Tonight is no different and this is what was spawned in result of said sleeping alement.

The wind picks up

a small howl

 

The sky darkens

eyes blink

 

Sounds in the distance

a light rumble

 

Nervous

shaking

Hands

 

A faint light

just over head

 

Walls tremble

forceful winds

 

Lights flicker

alone in darkness

 

Thunder

Right above me

 

Lightning

Right next to me

 

Rain

About three miles away

 

Damn Oklahoma Weather

Author's Note

Okay if the ending made you mad I'm sorry but it made me mad too. I was competely prepaird to run off to the celler because it was supposed to storm hellaciously. But nope. The rain stayed about three miles to the east of us. All we got was the pretty light show and the thunder that made your bones slap together.

Reviews

[ShantaeMarlinda]

I suffer from anxiety so this hits home in a big way. Everything starts to feel like it's closing in on you. It's only until after you've paniced, you realize it wasn't a big deal. I love the structure of this one. It sort of introduced the different levels of your disorder in waves. This was very creative. Great job!

[ANNA]

Well that ending doesn't make me mad. i don't Know why it would. When your words are poetry at heart! I love the new style. gives me a break from lokking at the same from anothers. Great write. Keep it up SunShine girl! hehe

Much love n respect,
Anna

[ANNA]

Well that ending doesn't make me mad. i don't Know why it would. When your words are poetry at heart! I love the new style. gives me a break from lokking at the same from anothers. Great write. Keep it up SunShine girl! hehe

Much love n respect,
Anna

[Kaye]

Actually, the ending didn't so much make me mad as it made me blink. It ends the poem very abruptly. Is there another way to end the poem than "Damn Oklahoma Weather"? Like... disappointed but still not sleeping and wishing your could sleep sort of thing? I'm not sure exactly.

Otherwise I really loved the format. It felt like you were having a sleeping disorder the way it sort of blinked in and out. Very cool.

[Mr. Lopez]

HAHAHA....sorry I don't mean to poke fun at your disorder. I think that you poem is actually written with a bit of humor (the ending) What i thought was really neat was the way that you make your readers understand and feel your anxiety by making the font sizes different. Very very creative. actually perfect for the effect. You rock !