My demons

Throwing your rum
Against an X’s wall
Shows what I’ve become
As I pass out in my hall

Shedding alcohol tears
Is quite a sign
Losing my life is a fear
I’m falling behind

My kids are asleep
I love them with my all
Though they silently weep
At their father’s fall

But I don’t want to stop
You know this alcoholism
Is my final drop
To what is one hell of an exorcism

So my demons are gone
But the memory does maul
Tonight I sleep on the lawn
With my stars I stall

Author's Note

I do NOT have kids
it was just a poem =)

Reviews

[Zeek]

There's alot of emotion in this...
I like it :)
I have a mother like this :/
But this is still a very very very good poem :)

[Randy`s Princess]

I like this one to it`s good I take it your also not an alchoholic either it`s real good though hey I found more raw talent on here nice

[Laura Yida <3]

this is amazing. awsome write. :)

[Alexis Raine]

Last two lines.
Gorgeous.

Sorry I'm spammin' you up with my reviews x)

[Rory CJ Frankson]

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WOW man this is crap... ha ha ha. Just yanking your chain pal. Thought I'd pop in cause you were right under the guy I was review and there 56 minuets before me... Col huh cause I'm 56 years old... of your poem time due,
no more f****n with ya.
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See Dutch Jr about a lot, he hasn't been around lately... Dutch ya you down there, sort review Bro, hey it works. You know Justin, I'm gonna talk about everything but your poem. Ha ha ah, what's the weather like there dude?
You got kids? Ok how old are ya... your pic's look like your like twelve, and I'm talking to a full blowed man here? [ With my stars I stall ] whoa wait a sec superlative line here. Nice! I just stole it. Naw I wouldn't do that Pal, I just jealous an wish I wrote it... ok review done I read your last line.

Have to say the rest was pretty damn good too. Gotta fly. Later Brother write [e] about outline I gave you. What else would you like your character to be like?

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Wrote On / Riight On! >>> Ro 05/26/10. 12:09am.
Quesnel BC CANADA. Peace & Soul Bro.

[Dutch Jr.]

"Shedding alcohol tears"... a beautiful line. A very well written poem, representative of an alcoholic's remorse. Great job.

[Animated Fox]

Wow. I'm rather speechless. All i can say is that it shows great emotion and I can only say great work!

[chaotic katie]

omg i love this its shows lots of emotion and imagry and is a great write
keep it up