Doomsday

Doomsday

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze
"

End of the world..

"

That day, the sky mourned and wailed,
for it knew, it was the last time.
One piece of light it yearned and craved,
for it was the last time.

It cried and cried till the tears were dry,
for it was the last time.
Nothing was spared in the storm,
even the dying screams sounded like hymns.

It was the finale the earth had awaited,
for centuries and centuries to come by
Never had it felt so serene in a whirlpool,
where birth was meeting its destined end

Death was not under veils any more,
it stood with integrity and candour.
Never had the silence sounded so loud
The day of Reckoning had finally arrived. 

It was only fair, to end at last,
for it had beared for ages and ages.
To get free from the horrid torments
The mortals had inflicted and laughed.

So for one last time the nature roared
For its mother who was embracing demise.
Nothing can alter the induced fate,
it was the last call and one last time.

© 2015 Jyoti_Ablaze


Author's Note

Jyoti_Ablaze
Originally composed for a then & there, college level contest with the theme 'EARTH'.
Still a little unsure of its length and abrupt end.
Lemme know what you think..!

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I liked the poem. A favorite poem of mine is.
"With a whisper,
with a whisper,
with a whisper,
not with a bang,
Man will vanish from the earth."
I believe nature will survive, man will not. A powerful poem. Made me think tonight.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

I am glad that it served its purpose. Thank you for the kind review.
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

You are welcome.



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"Death was not under veils anymore,
It stood with integrity and candour"
Love these lines. Beautifully written.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I appreciate.
I like the words and the flow & I wonder what you was actually thinking, imagining and what did you saw in the end. you proved it right! that the end of the earth would be really beautiful, but the scary tone of remembering you 'it was the last time' like you're in a dream & revealing the each & every moment of it. Wonderful! Piece.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your insightful comment!
you are damn good ...i am a tyro in this field may be u can take a look to my doomsday version...otherwise i am sure u can win any contest with that kind of an effort..bye

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Your version is pretty cool, dexterous sam! Imagery won't let the reader believe that you can be a t.. read more
nice use of repetition. there's no issue with the length, according to me. it seems to me that you have great imagination. great poem, this one!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Surya. I am glad you liked it!
Hey Jyoti, we all have our own vivid image about the end of
the world, some don't like to talk about it,while
Others embraced it. I enjoyed the way you used Mother Nature
As the pro's and con on this piece, for it may not be too late for
All of us.. or is it? Very cool poem, Thanks.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Late but not the end, yet.
Thank you so much for your encouraging review. :)
I really like the way you use your vocabulary. Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you. I am glad you liked it.
legendery tale....

love it..

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you.
Really good job! I like this one a lot

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you.
Finality! I like the Integrity and candor. The feeling of ultimate release, no holding back and then the loudness of ultimate silence forevermore!
I am glad at this time that it is yet but, a poem!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the insightful review.
Very nice wording!
Well done!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you Emily.

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