Doomsday

Doomsday

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze
"

End of the world..

"

That day, the sky mourned and wailed,
for it knew, it was the last time.
One piece of light it yearned and craved,
for it was the last time.

It cried and cried till the tears were dry,
for it was the last time.
Nothing was spared in the storm,
even the dying screams sounded like hymns.

It was the finale the earth had awaited,
for centuries and centuries to come by
Never had it felt so serene in a whirlpool,
where birth was meeting its destined end

Death was not under veils any more,
it stood with integrity and candour.
Never had the silence sounded so loud
The day of Reckoning had finally arrived. 

It was only fair, to end at last,
for it had beared for ages and ages.
To get free from the horrid torments
The mortals had inflicted and laughed.

So for one last time the nature roared
For its mother who was embracing demise.
Nothing can alter the induced fate,
it was the last call and one last time.

© 2015 Jyoti_Ablaze


Author's Note

Jyoti_Ablaze
Originally composed for a then & there, college level contest with the theme 'EARTH'.
Still a little unsure of its length and abrupt end.
Lemme know what you think..!

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I liked the poem. A favorite poem of mine is.
"With a whisper,
with a whisper,
with a whisper,
not with a bang,
Man will vanish from the earth."
I believe nature will survive, man will not. A powerful poem. Made me think tonight.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

I am glad that it served its purpose. Thank you for the kind review.
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

You are welcome.



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This is a very powerful poem Jyoti. You have explained death in a beautiful way with excellent flow of words. Keep writing more :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you!
Incredible poem Jyoti. It's not something we like to think about too much but it is bound to happen sooner or later. Your poem has made it a majestic rather than horrifying event. Very well done. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

I am glad that it served its purpose. Thank you!
Ah yes. The earth is being destroyed by humanity, but it will be the demise of humanity, not the planet. We will exterminate ourselves...
I loved the poem.
100 points.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Indeed!
Thank you..!
Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

You're welcome.
Poignant and powerful, dear Jyoti... how the painful world unfolds in this haunting end of days. Such tears and sorrow to see it all collapsing upon itself through this stirring vision.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you for imagining the ruins..!
A cha! it's really sounded as doomsday od it made me think of the end of the world when I read it . . . I love the rhythm in it . . . matlab? I really like it.

Don't mind my Hindu, I'm learning.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

I didn't mind your HINDI..! It is well placed! And thank you for the review..!
Dark with no bargaining chips for mankind. Love it! Let us just hope that we all get beamed up in
a blue light like the movie "This is the End. Nice.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you..!
Is it really doom when mankind is erased?

For us maybe, for the earth it is escape.

When I look around on this planet,
I sometimes feel we've overstayed our welcome.

Something I feel resonates with the words you wrote.

Powerful piece of work, Jyoti.






Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Yes indeed a final escape.
I am glad that it resonated with your thoughts on the subject.
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I liked the poem. A favorite poem of mine is.
"With a whisper,
with a whisper,
with a whisper,
not with a bang,
Man will vanish from the earth."
I believe nature will survive, man will not. A powerful poem. Made me think tonight.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

I am glad that it served its purpose. Thank you for the kind review.
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

You are welcome.
then and there........ WoW!!!
dark and powerful.......
quite profound.....
the length seems fine to me and ending didn't seem abrupt.......
beautifully done......
i liked it!!!
:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much.. And I am happy that you liked it..!
Pushkar Prabhat

8 Years Ago

you are welcome!!! :) :)

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