The algebraic expression for growing up

It isn't exactly finished yet, but I just wanted to see what yall thought of it so far =)

Three cups of cheaply brewed coffee,

six hours worth of

flirtatious telepathy

with my bedroom wall,

and five and a half minutes

until my alarm goes off.

Some call them bad habits,

but I’ll have you know that I’ve been doing this

since the sixth grade

and despite my parents’ expectations,

I’ve only tripped twice.

Twice.

Add that to the amount of

fingers slammed in doorframes.

Six.

Then to the number of

ripped bookbags destroyed

because of overconfidence

in the brand name.

Twelve.

To the number of missing ipods

and broken hearts.

Thirty-six.

Now add up all the

empty bottles of

black nail polish

I have hiding under my bed,

and multiply.

Two hundred and thirty-six.

Maybe I want to step into the classroom

with my right leg

at an 86 degree angle

to calculate the remaining degrees

between going forward

and turning around.

Turning around.

Like 360 degrees of a circle.

Like finding the coordinates

of your standing point,

then measuring the distance

to your prison of a desk.

Multiply by two

and there you have

the length between being

alone and feeling lonely.

If I fell down the stairs again,

or locked myself in the girls bathroom

until lunch time,

I could isolate the variable

and solve for the equation

of not giving up just yet.

So add three more cups of

cheaply brewed coffee,

six more hours of flirtatious

wall staring,

and hopefully no one

will notice

when I trip for the third time.

Reviews

[Fadedspeak]

There weren't a pair of lines in this poem put together that I couldn't visualize. A very good piece of work. Cheers. :)

[emma]

this is really awesome, a very cool and interesting poem, and super unique. i especially loved the opening and closing stanzas. amazing job.

[ARuth]

this is something new and interesting. I like it, not something you usually read. Great write!

[Jack...]

This is so very cool. Quite different for me and definitely thought provoking. I love it when I caom across a new style or theme or way of expressing thoughts. I loved this one.

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, an idea I used too about a girl sitting in a park teaching maths using what she saw, ducks times grass..... This works very well, intimate, confessional, the kind of poetry I enjoy

[Ken Simm.]

Angst and mathematics. Strange but working combination. Or should I say addition?

[Leigh]

I love the detail, that makes it so real. Coffee and Maths make a mind blowing concoction

[Dr. Wood ?]

brilliant...this reads like the opening of a movie about an infatuated mathematician dreamer

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for sharing your brilliance...:).............

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Simply amazing is your mixture to Algebra and daily objects, a fine poem.