A piece of cake

A piece of cake

A Poem by Loner
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Different perceptions of love and life from various people in the world ...... a wild thought again ...

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                         A piece of cake

For some life is a piece of cake on a plate
ready too eat, but suffering from diabetes
while some take it bit by bit relishing every
bite they eat, and some are so late in going

For it, that the icing melts on the fancy
plate spoiling all the fun of tasting the

piece of cake, but remember those also
who eat and eat this life's piece of cake

Too the point that they think they have
had enough sweetness for the day but cannot
seem to stop in anyway, and enjoy having
mouth fulls of this piece of cake till they fall sick
                       



For some love is a piece of cake looking fancy
and good to eat and attack at it, but when
tasted it turns out that the cream it had on
its self was sour, they spit it out, rinse their
mouth again and again but the taste of this

Loves piece of cake makes them throw up
until their lungs are about too come out
with the retching,  this makes them bitter
about loves piece of cake and vow never

To go near it again, then after many years that
familiar tongue's taste buds crave for that
loves piece of cake again and you end up
having loads of it getting full too the brim

Life sees all this standing aside and prepares
a piece of cake of its own just to make you
give a taste of your own medicine, making
you either fall on your face or making you

Fly in the seventh heaven giving you wings
too fly with holding its piece of cake in its
hands, you run to taste it just once, and there
you go again, you just cannot stop having

This devilish piece of cake once again..........

© 2012 Loner


Author's Note

Loner
An experiment of mine by combining love and
life's piece of cake by placing it on a fancy plate ... just for
you too eat it .......... Enjoy !

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I think you're getting confused with 'too' and 'to'


Posted 6 Years Ago


We all fall for a sweet tastey cake ever now in then, but wish sometimes we had just stayed away. Nice and descriptive!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Loner

6 Years Ago

Thanks for your review kind friend
Once under the spell it is hard to leave it behind!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Loner

6 Years Ago

Thanks once again.
You've done a great job mixing up this and that in this piece.
I really liked the ending, especially the part about life seeing all this aside and preparing its own piece of cake.
Good job!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Loner

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your sweet review dear
very well written. I especially like the diabetes reference at the top.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Loner

7 Years Ago

Thanks again BC for your sweet review....
You exploit the image with good effect... giving us a taste of the possibilities and highlighting the irresistible attraction of the sweetness of love's experiences... You are the icing on the cake..

Posted 7 Years Ago


Loner

7 Years Ago

* Smiles * ........ u are way too generous Jibey thanks again
for your lovely review......
Wow! I am once again, awed. The use of cake, not only does that start out with an idea of a flavor, but it trancends beautifully into this amazing poem. The different takes and ideas that come from this, it is certainly food for thought. Well done, this is amazing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Loner

7 Years Ago

Thanks friend for your encouraging review .......
Wow!! Great how you take the concept of a piece of cake
and manage to create different viewpoints/metaphors to give an
all rounded poem, nothing left out...
Top work, I love it :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Loner

7 Years Ago

U are way too generous yas i am but a loner
saying aloud pointless things ........
SoulCrusader (Yas)

7 Years Ago

You have me, so not a loner anymore :)
Loner

7 Years Ago

* Smiles *

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