Nightmare

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Nightmares

 

A dream will come by light of day.

The long night’s end I can see,

So rest and let come what may.

 

Your fears will follow by running away

Open your mind, and listen to me!

A dream will come by light of day.

 

I beg you to hear what I must say

Nothing is hidden beneath the tree

So rest and let come what may.

 

Night will not hear you pray,

It is but a vast, empty sea.

A dream will come by light of day.

 

Your mind is where these demons lay

They are not there, you should not flee

So rest and let come what may

 

The ones to get you are not they;

Do not worry, you needn’t plea

A dream will come by light of day

 So rest and let come what may.

Author's Note

I was attempting this in class,
wracking my brains, failing and
could almost feel my poor brain
leaking out of my ear. So I had
to find a way to save myself.

I began to think of other things,
and It went like this.

All County Chorus Audition Piece
A portion of [Sleep by Eric Whitacre]

Lord of the Flies...They killed Piggy!

Lord of the Flies. Wouldn't they
all be villans for Murdering Simon?
Poor Simon.

You know who else kills.
Sweeny Todd, the Demon Barber of Fleet Street.

And suddenly! INSPIRATION.

I hate evil things.
This one is the kind that
can symbolize anything to the reader.

I loved writing this, and I hope you enjoy reading it!

Comment as you wish.

Reviews

[Wildfleour]

You are too cute..........so all that was running through your brain! Sounds like every minute in mine! :)

This is terrific, Katie. Maybe you should will read this on Friday (hint hint)?

Drop the comma before and (smile....I had to find something....) Also, try to avoid telling the reader too much about your poem. Leave it open to his/her interpretation.

[Cameron]

This poem flows wonderfully, and the refrain is very powerful and memorable. The poem is just ambiguous enough to go a multitude of different ways, but I see your primary meaning embedded within. I thought it could be read as sort of being in a derisive tone, as if someone was mocking the one having a nightmare. I like the meaning you espouse in the footnote though. Excellent rhythm and tone.

[Justin Tobey]

Awesome job, Katie! The rhyme and structure flow beautifully, and there is deep meaning here, symbolism from all angles. It teaches that even the darkest things eventually give birth to light, as the shining stars appear in the depth of black night. Wonderful job. :)

[laceyjane23]

i really enjoyed reading this poem, and i am glad that you had a great time writing it, some of our best work comes from the pieces that we are most proud of and the pieces we seem to struggle with the most. great job, keep on writing!
laceyjane