Rain.

The weeping old man.

Sky eye filled with cloudy tears,
Growling in pains of heaviness,
He shook the heavens and stun the earth,
With its clamorous screams of dread.

Within seconds, he began to weep,
With rivers of tears flowing in agony.
Men in happiness planted their seeds,
Praying for its pain to forever increase.

Rain more! rain more!! They scream aloud,
Rain and let our seed germinate so fast.
Even fishes and birds are glad at his teardrops,
Along with every other living creatures.

Trees shout "haha we need that more",
Flowers rejoice at its heavy downpour,
Wind blew freshness at coastal ports,
Making penguins to leap for joy.

Truly he is always a faithful fellow,
Always enduring the pains and blows,
No one ever cares if he'll die too soon,
We are all here rejoicing at an old man's sorrow.

Author's Note

Just looking around and this loop into my mind.

What do you think?

Reviews

[Lorry]

I probably interpret this differently, coming from a country that rain free days are the minority. It to me is a required nuisance, yet where would we be without it? We need it to live, to grow food and continue its cycle, yet grumble when I leave home without a brolly, when in reality it should be welded to my hand.
I guess I should just be grateful I don't live in a dessert😀

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for your point of view here, Lorry.
I really much appreciate it.
And I'm glad it made you feel grateful.

[Dave Brown]

It appears we each have rain on the mind having taken two very different directions.
You have had more readers than I did so it seems you have the more popular interpretation.
You win!!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Dave.
I'll try and look into your Rain too.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I like that loop Kay as it has imagination and sensitivity and intellegent energy. I love the thrust of this and the idea of the heaven's weaping. Two small suggestions, one: Stanza 1, line three 'stuns' and two: stanza 4, line 4 'making penguins leap for joy's.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you John.
You've always been helpful.
I really much appreciate that.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

The one good thing about rain is that there's always a rainbow, the hope for promise and the hope for better things to come. Without a rainbow in our heart, we have no hope.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Linda
I really appreciate your review.

[barleygirl]

Many people are writing about rain . . . we had about sixteen drops this week, so everyone is eager for real autumn rains to begin! Your poem is a great celebration of the coming rains & all that the rain can bring, while you also present your lively scene with an unusual contrast: we reap & sow while the rain man cries. I felt your personification of rain was not as strong as it could be. One thing to bring old rain man alive would be using the pronoun "he" instead of "it" when you refer to rain. Other than that, your imagery is fresh & dynamic . . . your point of view always unique! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Margie.
You got my point.
I'll do those adjustment.

[Chris Shaw]

I am reminded here that there is much to weep about in the world. Rivers of tears indeed when you see the behaviour of many. I am also reminded how rainfall can revive everything. In parts of the world where there is drought rainfall can be welcomed with open arms. That's where you took me Kay.

Chris

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your wonderful point of view, Chris.
I really appreciate it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think there are those who might embrace the tears, but my thought went to God crying at what the world has become...at all the terror and hate that humans have created...and he surely didn't intend this...and it saddens him greatly...
i feel a very sad allegory in these words.
j.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

That's true, Jacob.
It's like heaven is not happy with what the earth has become.

read moreThat's true, Jacob.
It's like heaven is not happy with what the earth has become.

Thank you so much for your thoughtful review.